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:*[[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]]The article itself is okay, but the hook might benefit from some attention. The overly formal vocabulary dilutes its hooky interest. Most of our readers probably won't known what an appropriation bill is, for instance. I think it could be rephrased to make it a bit easier to understand and attract attention. [[User:Abyssal|Abyssal]] ([[User talk:Abyssal|talk]]) 15:40, 25 September 2012 (UTC)
  
  
 
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18th Arizona Territorial Legislature

Created/expanded by Allen3 (talk). Self nom at 23:17, 10 September 2012 (UTC)

  • Symbol question.svgThe article itself is okay, but the hook might benefit from some attention. The overly formal vocabulary dilutes its hooky interest. Most of our readers probably won't known what an appropriation bill is, for instance. I think it could be rephrased to make it a bit easier to understand and attract attention. Abyssal (talk) 15:40, 25 September 2012 (UTC)