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====Haley Farm State Park==== | ====Haley Farm State Park==== | ||
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* <s>... that the [[State of Connecticut]] acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of '''[[Haley Farm State Park|Haley Farm]]''' from A. C. White for a total of $300,000?</s> | * <s>... that the [[State of Connecticut]] acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of '''[[Haley Farm State Park|Haley Farm]]''' from A. C. White for a total of $300,000?</s> | ||
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:* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/Daresbury (Mersey flat)|Daresbury (Mersey flat)]] | :* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/Daresbury (Mersey flat)|Daresbury (Mersey flat)]] | ||
<small>Created/expanded by [[User:ChrisGualtieri|ChrisGualtieri]] ([[User talk:ChrisGualtieri|talk]]). Self nominated at 16:38, 15 April 2014 (UTC)</small>. | <small>Created/expanded by [[User:ChrisGualtieri|ChrisGualtieri]] ([[User talk:ChrisGualtieri|talk]]). Self nominated at 16:38, 15 April 2014 (UTC)</small>. | ||
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:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Date, size, hook, refs are fine. But I'd suggest a bit longer and more interesting hook below. The alt 1 will need to be ok'ed by another reviewer, but that's just a formality. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">[[User:Piotrus|Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus]]|[[User talk:Piotrus|<font style="color:#7CFC00;background:#006400;"> reply here</font>]]</sub> 05:56, 16 April 2014 (UTC) | :* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Date, size, hook, refs are fine. But I'd suggest a bit longer and more interesting hook below. The alt 1 will need to be ok'ed by another reviewer, but that's just a formality. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">[[User:Piotrus|Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus]]|[[User talk:Piotrus|<font style="color:#7CFC00;background:#006400;"> reply here</font>]]</sub> 05:56, 16 April 2014 (UTC) | ||
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:*'''ALT1a''': ... that in 1970, [[Connecticut]] acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of '''[[Haley Farm State Park|Haley Farm]]''' from A. C. White for a total of $300,000 and declared it a [[state park]]? | :*'''ALT1a''': ... that in 1970, [[Connecticut]] acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of '''[[Haley Farm State Park|Haley Farm]]''' from A. C. White for a total of $300,000 and declared it a [[state park]]? | ||
:The ALT hook is much better than the original, but still not great. I thought about trying to get the fact that the 198 acres was effectively repossessed by White from the construction company he sold it to (he sold 250 and reclaimed 198) into the hook, but I couldn't figure out an interesting way to do that. Another interesting fact is that the sale was predicated on the public raising the final half of its $50,000 goal in a short period of time; FN3 says that the state gave the Groton Open Space Association about two months to finish raising the funds. This could be done by adding a phrase to ALT1a, but the new hook would again require an independent reviewer's approval to make sure the newly added article text and sourcing is sufficient: | :The ALT hook is much better than the original, but still not great. I thought about trying to get the fact that the 198 acres was effectively repossessed by White from the construction company he sold it to (he sold 250 and reclaimed 198) into the hook, but I couldn't figure out an interesting way to do that. Another interesting fact is that the sale was predicated on the public raising the final half of its $50,000 goal in a short period of time; FN3 says that the state gave the Groton Open Space Association about two months to finish raising the funds. This could be done by adding a phrase to ALT1a, but the new hook would again require an independent reviewer's approval to make sure the newly added article text and sourcing is sufficient: | ||
| − | :*'''ALT2a''' (requires approval still!): ... that in 1970, with the aid of $50,000 in locally raised funds, [[Connecticut]] acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of '''[[Haley Farm State Park|Haley Farm]]''' from A. C. White for $300,000 and declared it a [[state park]]? —[[User:BlueMoonset|BlueMoonset]] ([[User talk:BlueMoonset|talk]]) 04:48, 28 April 2014 (UTC) | + | :*'''ALT2a''' (requires approval still!): ... that in 1970, with the aid of $50,000 in locally raised funds, [[Connecticut]] acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of '''[[Haley Farm State Park|Haley Farm]]''' from A. C. White for $300,000 and declared it a [[state park]]? —[[User:BlueMoonset|BlueMoonset]] ([[User talk:BlueMoonset|talk]]) 04:48, 28 April 2014 (UTC)</div></noinclude><!--Please do not write below this line or remove this line. Place comments above this line.--> |
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Latest revision as of 09:05, 28 April 2014
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 09:05, 28 April 2014 (UTC)
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Haley Farm State Park
... that the State of Connecticut acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of Haley Farm from A. C. White for a total of $300,000?
- Reviewed: Daresbury (Mersey flat)
Created/expanded by ChrisGualtieri (talk). Self nominated at 16:38, 15 April 2014 (UTC).
- 16px Date, size, hook, refs are fine. But I'd suggest a bit longer and more interesting hook below. The alt 1 will need to be ok'ed by another reviewer, but that's just a formality. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 05:56, 16 April 2014 (UTC)
- ALT1: ... that in 1970 the State of Connecticut acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of Haley Farm from A. C. White for a total of $300,000 and declared it a state park?
- Yeah, I like that. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 20:01, 17 April 2014 (UTC)
- 16px ALT1 supported by inline sourcing; rewriting as ALT1a since the article about the state is Connecticut and "state" already appears at the end of the hook (no facts have changed):
- ALT1a: ... that in 1970, Connecticut acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of Haley Farm from A. C. White for a total of $300,000 and declared it a state park?
- The ALT hook is much better than the original, but still not great. I thought about trying to get the fact that the 198 acres was effectively repossessed by White from the construction company he sold it to (he sold 250 and reclaimed 198) into the hook, but I couldn't figure out an interesting way to do that. Another interesting fact is that the sale was predicated on the public raising the final half of its $50,000 goal in a short period of time; FN3 says that the state gave the Groton Open Space Association about two months to finish raising the funds. This could be done by adding a phrase to ALT1a, but the new hook would again require an independent reviewer's approval to make sure the newly added article text and sourcing is sufficient:
- ALT2a (requires approval still!): ... that in 1970, with the aid of $50,000 in locally raised funds, Connecticut acquired 198 acres (108 ha) of Haley Farm from A. C. White for $300,000 and declared it a state park? —BlueMoonset (talk) 04:48, 28 April 2014 (UTC)
