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:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] The 5x expansion in the 5 days prior to nom is confirmed, the article is well sourced, and I don't see any copyvio-type issues from sources, so the article appears fine. (I would consider making a map of the path of the storm since you can get that from one of the sources but that's outside the perview of DKY). QPQ is met. The hook's facts are sourced appropriately. My only bit of concern is on the wording of the first hook, with the "second-greatest" part without clarification makes it seem like it means up until today, though the claim seems to have been made in 1934. I don't know if this would still qualify as that, so the way the first hook is written is odd, but captured better in ALT2, though I really appreciate the pressure measurements that the first two hooks have.  Perhaps "... that the '''[[1934 Muroto typhoon]]''' was, at the time, regarded as the "second[-]greatest catastrophe of modern Japan with record low land-based [[Atmospheric pressure|pressure]] measurements of {{convert|911.9|hPa|inHg|abbr=on|lk=on}}?" (that's just a few chars shorter); I think that wording implies properly that the measurements were "at the time" properly so that we're reflecting what assessment was made about the storm then, and not today. Also I would suggest the lede image as an image here for the hook, but that's optional. --[[User:Masem|M<font size="-3">ASEM</font>]] ([[User Talk:Masem|t]]) 20:25, 12 February 2016 (UTC)
  
 
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Revision as of 20:25, 12 February 2016

1934 Muroto typhoon

  • ... that during the 1934 Muroto typhoon, regarded as the "second[-]greatest catastrophe of modern Japan", a then-world record low land-based pressure of 911.9 hPa (26.93 inHg) was observed?
  • ALT1:... that during the 1934 Muroto typhoon, a then-world record low land-based pressure of 911.9 hPa (26.93 inHg) was observed in Muroto, Japan?
  • ALT2:... that the 1934 Muroto typhoon was, at the time, regarded as the "second[-]greatest catastrophe of modern Japan"?
  • Reviewed: 2.0 (film)
  • Comment: First hook is to provide a bit more of a "meaty" hook to readers to convey the significance of this typhoon (character count is 185, just within the general limit). Second and third hooks are a split versions of the first.

5x expanded by Cyclonebiskit (talk). Self-nominated at 00:00, 19 January 2016 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The 5x expansion in the 5 days prior to nom is confirmed, the article is well sourced, and I don't see any copyvio-type issues from sources, so the article appears fine. (I would consider making a map of the path of the storm since you can get that from one of the sources but that's outside the perview of DKY). QPQ is met. The hook's facts are sourced appropriately. My only bit of concern is on the wording of the first hook, with the "second-greatest" part without clarification makes it seem like it means up until today, though the claim seems to have been made in 1934. I don't know if this would still qualify as that, so the way the first hook is written is odd, but captured better in ALT2, though I really appreciate the pressure measurements that the first two hooks have. Perhaps "... that the 1934 Muroto typhoon was, at the time, regarded as the "second[-]greatest catastrophe of modern Japan with record low land-based pressure measurements of 911.9 hPa (26.93 inHg)?" (that's just a few chars shorter); I think that wording implies properly that the measurements were "at the time" properly so that we're reflecting what assessment was made about the storm then, and not today. Also I would suggest the lede image as an image here for the hook, but that's optional. --MASEM (t) 20:25, 12 February 2016 (UTC)