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:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] New (Dec 15th), long enough, neutral, a few close paraphrasing concerns [https://tools.wmflabs.org/dupdet/compare.php?url1=https%3A%2F%2Fen.wikipedia.org%2Fw%2Findex.php%3Ftitle%3DAdrift_%28video_game%29%26oldid%3D640337491&url2=http%3A%2F%2Fkotaku.com%2Fadam-orth-is-turning-his-personal-disaster-into-a-beaut-1520037629&minwords=2&minchars=13&removequotations=1 here], [[Wikipedia:QPQ|QPQ]] done. First hook needs an immediate ref in article (see [[Wikipedia:Did you know#Eligibility criteria|3b]]). Rephrased second hook to be a bit more neutral. Really, really nice work with this. Please ping me if I don't respond. <span style='font:bold small-caps 1.2em "Avenir";color:#909'>czar</span>&nbsp;[[user:czar|<span style="color:black;font-size:1.2em"><u>⨹</u></span>]] 23:45, 10 January 2015 (UTC)
 
:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] New (Dec 15th), long enough, neutral, a few close paraphrasing concerns [https://tools.wmflabs.org/dupdet/compare.php?url1=https%3A%2F%2Fen.wikipedia.org%2Fw%2Findex.php%3Ftitle%3DAdrift_%28video_game%29%26oldid%3D640337491&url2=http%3A%2F%2Fkotaku.com%2Fadam-orth-is-turning-his-personal-disaster-into-a-beaut-1520037629&minwords=2&minchars=13&removequotations=1 here], [[Wikipedia:QPQ|QPQ]] done. First hook needs an immediate ref in article (see [[Wikipedia:Did you know#Eligibility criteria|3b]]). Rephrased second hook to be a bit more neutral. Really, really nice work with this. Please ping me if I don't respond. <span style='font:bold small-caps 1.2em "Avenir";color:#909'>czar</span>&nbsp;[[user:czar|<span style="color:black;font-size:1.2em"><u>⨹</u></span>]] 23:45, 10 January 2015 (UTC)
 
:::Thanks for the feedback, {{u|czar}}! I've gone ahead and changed some of the things you mentioned. Let me know if there are any remaining problems. -- [[User:Rhain1999|<span style="color: #008;">'''''Rhain'''''1999</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Rhain1999|talk to me]])</sup> 02:13, 11 January 2015 (UTC)
 
:::Thanks for the feedback, {{u|czar}}! I've gone ahead and changed some of the things you mentioned. Let me know if there are any remaining problems. -- [[User:Rhain1999|<span style="color: #008;">'''''Rhain'''''1999</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Rhain1999|talk to me]])</sup> 02:13, 11 January 2015 (UTC)
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:::: [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] works for me, hooks check out, gtg. One thing I'd add is that the close paraphrasing [https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Adrift_(video_game)&diff=641954741&oldid=641937730 changes] should be more than moving around the affected words but recasting the sentence to similar words wherever they can be avoided <span style='font:bold small-caps 1.2em "Avenir";color:#909'>czar</span>&nbsp;[[user:czar|<span style="color:black;font-size:1.2em"><u>⨹</u></span>]] 02:27, 11 January 2015 (UTC)
 
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Adrift (video game)

  • ... that the original prototype for the upcoming video game Adrift was developed by three people in ten weeks?

Created by Rhain1999 (talk). Self nominated at 08:05, 15 December 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The hook - while compelling - seems to be sourced to a self-published source, namely, the video game publisher's own website. Could the hook be changed to "that developers claimed the original ..."? Other than that it's new enough, long enough, well-sourced, and seems to meet all other criteria. DocumentError (talk) 01:41, 17 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Template:Ping I have actually read some external sources that back up the statement in the hook, but I'm fine with changing the hook as you suggested. -- Rhain1999 (talk to me) 04:03, 17 December 2014 (UTC)
  • Also, would it be possible to change the hook so that the title of the game reads "ADR1FT"? This is the official title for the game, and I actually believe that the article itself should be renamed if it does not conflict with any policies. -- Rhain1999 (talk to me) 01:49, 18 December 2014 (UTC)
Template:Ping, courtesy ping. Re: ADR1FT, the precedent of Se7en and Driv3r is to not spell it that way (with the sole exception of mentioning it once as a stylization in the lede). czar  04:38, 2 January 2015 (UTC)
I thought this was the case. Thanks for the information, Template:U! -- Rhain1999 (talk to me) 08:34, 2 January 2015 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Original reviewer has not responded to this. New review requested. Fuebaey (talk) 22:07, 10 January 2015 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg New (Dec 15th), long enough, neutral, a few close paraphrasing concerns here, QPQ done. First hook needs an immediate ref in article (see 3b). Rephrased second hook to be a bit more neutral. Really, really nice work with this. Please ping me if I don't respond. czar  23:45, 10 January 2015 (UTC)
Thanks for the feedback, Template:U! I've gone ahead and changed some of the things you mentioned. Let me know if there are any remaining problems. -- Rhain1999 (talk to me) 02:13, 11 January 2015 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg works for me, hooks check out, gtg. One thing I'd add is that the close paraphrasing changes should be more than moving around the affected words but recasting the sentence to similar words wherever they can be avoided czar  02:27, 11 January 2015 (UTC)