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* ... that the population of the endangered '''''[[Aipysurus fuscus]]''''' is thought to have declined at least 70% between 1998 and 2013?  <small>{{cite journal | title = ''Aipysurus fuscus'' | journal = [[IUCN Red List of Threatened Species]] | volume= 2010 | publisher = [[IUCN]] | year = 2009 | url = http://www.iucnredlist.org/details/176763/0 | accessdate = 20 December 2016}}</small>
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* ... that the population of the endangered [[Hydrophiinae|sea snake]] '''''[[Aipysurus fuscus]]''''' is thought to have declined at least 70% between 1998 and 2013?  <small>{{cite journal | title = ''Aipysurus fuscus'' | journal = [[IUCN Red List of Threatened Species]] | volume= 2010 | publisher = [[IUCN]] | year = 2009 | url = http://www.iucnredlist.org/details/176763/0 | accessdate = 20 December 2016}}</small>
 
:* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/Nellie Griswold Francis|Nellie Griswold Francis]]
 
:* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/Nellie Griswold Francis|Nellie Griswold Francis]]
 
<small>5x expanded by [[User:Vanamonde93|Vanamonde93]] ([[User talk:Vanamonde93|talk]]). Self-nominated at 04:25, 21 April 2017 (UTC).</small>
 
<small>5x expanded by [[User:Vanamonde93|Vanamonde93]] ([[User talk:Vanamonde93|talk]]). Self-nominated at 04:25, 21 April 2017 (UTC).</small>
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:*A nice little article. New enough, long enough, citation checks out, good hook. Two recommendations. First, "It is found in Australia, Indonesia and East Timor" seems a little optimistic. Second, perhaps you could use a common name in the hook? I suspect, for readers, "rare coral snake" is more exciting than "rare thingy that could be a mould for all I know". [[User:J Milburn|Josh Milburn]] ([[User talk:J Milburn|talk]]) 21:57, 21 April 2017 (UTC)
 
:*A nice little article. New enough, long enough, citation checks out, good hook. Two recommendations. First, "It is found in Australia, Indonesia and East Timor" seems a little optimistic. Second, perhaps you could use a common name in the hook? I suspect, for readers, "rare coral snake" is more exciting than "rare thingy that could be a mould for all I know". [[User:J Milburn|Josh Milburn]] ([[User talk:J Milburn|talk]]) 21:57, 21 April 2017 (UTC)
 
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::*{{ping|J Milburn}} Both good points. I've changed the lead to read "in the Timor Sea, between Australia...". It turns out this is not actually a coral snake; that bit of text was in the article before, and somehow I did not spot it and correct it. It's a sea snake, from Hydrophiinae, which I've added to the hook. [[User:Vanamonde93|Vanamonde]] ([[User talk:Vanamonde93|talk]]) 05:14, 22 April 2017 (UTC)
 
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Aipysurus fuscus

  • ... that the population of the endangered sea snake Aipysurus fuscus is thought to have declined at least 70% between 1998 and 2013? "Aipysurus fuscus". IUCN Red List of Threatened Species. IUCN. 2010. 2009. Retrieved 20 December 2016.

5x expanded by Vanamonde93 (talk). Self-nominated at 04:25, 21 April 2017 (UTC).

  • A nice little article. New enough, long enough, citation checks out, good hook. Two recommendations. First, "It is found in Australia, Indonesia and East Timor" seems a little optimistic. Second, perhaps you could use a common name in the hook? I suspect, for readers, "rare coral snake" is more exciting than "rare thingy that could be a mould for all I know". Josh Milburn (talk) 21:57, 21 April 2017 (UTC)
  • Template:Ping Both good points. I've changed the lead to read "in the Timor Sea, between Australia...". It turns out this is not actually a coral snake; that bit of text was in the article before, and somehow I did not spot it and correct it. It's a sea snake, from Hydrophiinae, which I've added to the hook. Vanamonde (talk) 05:14, 22 April 2017 (UTC)