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:*[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] New enough, long enough, within policy. '''ALT3''' is the best and cited. QPQ exempted. Good to go. [[User:Vincent60030|<span style="color: orange">Vincent</span>]]<sup>[[User:Vincent60030/London Underground|<span style="color: red">LUFan</span>]]</sup> ([[User talk:Vincent60030|talk]]) <small>([[Special:Contributions/Vincent60030|Kenton!]])</small> 15:04, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
 
:*[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] New enough, long enough, within policy. '''ALT3''' is the best and cited. QPQ exempted. Good to go. [[User:Vincent60030|<span style="color: orange">Vincent</span>]]<sup>[[User:Vincent60030/London Underground|<span style="color: red">LUFan</span>]]</sup> ([[User talk:Vincent60030|talk]]) <small>([[Special:Contributions/Vincent60030|Kenton!]])</small> 15:04, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
 
::*[[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Hi, I came by to promote ALT3, but upon reviewing the source I see you have a much better hook in the fact that they confiscated students' phones and gave them different ones. Also, any reader who clicks on the article to find out more about ALT3 will not find out anything. You need to add more from the source to satisfy readers' interest in your hook fact. [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 18:53, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
 
::*[[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Hi, I came by to promote ALT3, but upon reviewing the source I see you have a much better hook in the fact that they confiscated students' phones and gave them different ones. Also, any reader who clicks on the article to find out more about ALT3 will not find out anything. You need to add more from the source to satisfy readers' interest in your hook fact. [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 18:53, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
 
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:::* {{ping|Yoninah}} I have expanded the content of the article in the paragraph covering ALT3, and for ALT0 and ALT1 to a smaller extant. While I take your point about more details being needed, I'm not sure exactly what is needed in this particular case, are my new additions enough? As possible alternatives, I submit the following hooks.[[User:CSJJ104|CSJJ104]] ([[User talk:CSJJ104|talk]]) 23:17, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
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:::* '''ALT4''':... that when '''[[Bertha Park High School]]''' opened all the pupils were provided with [[iPad]]s, but had to lock their own phones in lockers?
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:::* '''ALT5''':... that '''[[Bertha Park High School]]''' was the first new high school in [[Scotland]] since 2002?
 
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Revision as of 23:18, 5 September 2020

Bertha Park High School

  • Comment: Not sure what best to put in a hook, hence the additional choices.

Moved to mainspace by CSJJ104 (talk). Self-nominated at 15:18, 22 August 2020 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg New enough, long enough, within policy. ALT3 is the best and cited. QPQ exempted. Good to go. VincentLUFan (talk) (Kenton!) 15:04, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Hi, I came by to promote ALT3, but upon reviewing the source I see you have a much better hook in the fact that they confiscated students' phones and gave them different ones. Also, any reader who clicks on the article to find out more about ALT3 will not find out anything. You need to add more from the source to satisfy readers' interest in your hook fact. Yoninah (talk) 18:53, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
  • Template:Ping I have expanded the content of the article in the paragraph covering ALT3, and for ALT0 and ALT1 to a smaller extant. While I take your point about more details being needed, I'm not sure exactly what is needed in this particular case, are my new additions enough? As possible alternatives, I submit the following hooks.CSJJ104 (talk) 23:17, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
  • ALT4:... that when Bertha Park High School opened all the pupils were provided with iPads, but had to lock their own phones in lockers?
  • ALT5:... that Bertha Park High School was the first new high school in Scotland since 2002?