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::*[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] New enough, long enough. I remove some words that were too close to the original; I did not see more. Hope you get lots of hits. This is Meghan's first DYK, so no review is required. [[User:Drmies|Drmies]] ([[User talk:Drmies|talk]]) 03:12, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
 
::*[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] New enough, long enough. I remove some words that were too close to the original; I did not see more. Hope you get lots of hits. This is Meghan's first DYK, so no review is required. [[User:Drmies|Drmies]] ([[User talk:Drmies|talk]]) 03:12, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
 
*Looks like there's still a few instances of wording too close to the sources: compare for example the first paragraph of Teaching to [http://www.au.af.mil/au/goe/eagle_bios/1990/strother_1990.asp this source] - the order of the sentences is different, but their presentation is very similar. [[User:Nikkimaria|Nikkimaria]] ([[User talk:Nikkimaria|talk]]) 01:04, 2 September 2013 (UTC)
 
*Looks like there's still a few instances of wording too close to the sources: compare for example the first paragraph of Teaching to [http://www.au.af.mil/au/goe/eagle_bios/1990/strother_1990.asp this source] - the order of the sentences is different, but their presentation is very similar. [[User:Nikkimaria|Nikkimaria]] ([[User talk:Nikkimaria|talk]]) 01:04, 2 September 2013 (UTC)
::*Thank you for reviewing & suggesting changes - I have modified the wording to distinguish from sources. Please let me know if I can do more to improve the article. Also, the image included with this nomination might be noteworthy & relevant for DYK as it was taken just after she established one of the cited flight records.--[[User:Meghaninmotion|Meghaninmotion]] ([[User talk:Meghaninmotion|talk]]) 13:27, 2 September 2013 (UTC)
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::*Thank you for reviewing & suggesting changes - I have addressed the wording issue and suggest an ALT hook below, as well.
:*I've removed the metrics (distance/height) of the records to make a tighter hook; after looking at some other recent hooks, this alternative hook may also suit for piquing interest -
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::*'''ALT 1''': ... that [[Women Airforce Service Pilots| WASP]] pilot Dr. '''[[Dora Dougherty Strother]]''' was one of two women selected to train and fly the [[B-29 Superfortress]] in 1944 in order to prove it was safe for men to fly?--[[User:Meghaninmotion|Meghaninmotion]] ([[User talk:Meghaninmotion|talk]]) 14:40, 6 September 2013 (UTC)
::*'''ALT 1''': ... that [[Women Airforce Service Pilots| WASP]] pilot Dr. '''[[Dora Dougherty Strother]]''' was one of two women selected to train and fly the [[B-29 Superfortress]] in 1944 in order to prove it was safe for men to fly?--[[User:Meghaninmotion|Meghaninmotion]] ([[User talk:Meghaninmotion|talk]]) 16:19, 3 September 2013 (UTC)
 
 
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Revision as of 14:40, 6 September 2013

Dora Dougherty Strother

Dora Jean Dougherty Strother congratulated by Bell chief test pilot R.C. Buyers (at left) and company president E.J. Ducayet (at right) in 1961 just after breaking the helicopter altitude record (at 19,406 feet) in a Bell 47G-3

Created by Meghaninmotion (talk). Self nominated at 13:55, 26 August 2013 (UTC).

  • Looking into this--copy edits first. Drmies (talk) 02:55, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg New enough, long enough. I remove some words that were too close to the original; I did not see more. Hope you get lots of hits. This is Meghan's first DYK, so no review is required. Drmies (talk) 03:12, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Looks like there's still a few instances of wording too close to the sources: compare for example the first paragraph of Teaching to this source - the order of the sentences is different, but their presentation is very similar. Nikkimaria (talk) 01:04, 2 September 2013 (UTC)
  • Thank you for reviewing & suggesting changes - I have addressed the wording issue and suggest an ALT hook below, as well.
  • ALT 1: ... that WASP pilot Dr. Dora Dougherty Strother was one of two women selected to train and fly the B-29 Superfortress in 1944 in order to prove it was safe for men to fly?--Meghaninmotion (talk) 14:40, 6 September 2013 (UTC)