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::::::::::* {{re|Yoninah|Pratyk321}} How about this below? I tried to compose both of your ideas into one and the hook is of length 199 words. — [[User:Amkgp|Amkgp]] [[User talk:Amkgp|<big>💬</big>]] 06:24, 11 December 2020 (UTC)
 
::::::::::* {{re|Yoninah|Pratyk321}} How about this below? I tried to compose both of your ideas into one and the hook is of length 199 words. — [[User:Amkgp|Amkgp]] [[User talk:Amkgp|<big>💬</big>]] 06:24, 11 December 2020 (UTC)
 
:*'''ALT4''':... that the Panchkuta [[basadi]] ''(pictured)'' in the '''[[Humcha Jain temples|Humcha Jain temple complex]]''' houses a golden-coloured idol of [[Padmavati (Jainism)|Padmavati]] carrying a lotus, a goad, and a noose is one of the eleven surviving [[Bhattaraka#Present_Bhattaraka_Seats|Bhattaraka seats]]?
 
:*'''ALT4''':... that the Panchkuta [[basadi]] ''(pictured)'' in the '''[[Humcha Jain temples|Humcha Jain temple complex]]''' houses a golden-coloured idol of [[Padmavati (Jainism)|Padmavati]] carrying a lotus, a goad, and a noose is one of the eleven surviving [[Bhattaraka#Present_Bhattaraka_Seats|Bhattaraka seats]]?
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::*Thank you for the suggestion, {{u|Amkgp}}, but there are too many facts in that hook. I'd also like to note that all these Indian words will not be recognizable by our English-speaking audience. ALT0a is telling a story without any context; it also needs grammatical help. If {{u|Pratyk321}} wants to go with ALT1a, that's fine, but it also is very geocentric and probably won't be of interest to most readers. [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 11:31, 11 December 2020 (UTC)
 
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Revision as of 11:31, 11 December 2020

Humcha Jain temples

Panchkuta Basadi, Humcha
Panchkuta Basadi, Humcha

Created by Pratyk321 (talk). Self-nominated at 19:57, 3 November 2020 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Prose size enough (5377 characters (861 words)), created 1 day before nomination, hook short enough, content interesting, QPQ not required.Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 10:41, 15 November 2020 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg Sorry, but all these hooks need copyediting for English grammar, and so does the article. The whole lead is not subscribing to English grammar: Template:Tq A quick glance at the body shows the second sentence also has problems: Template:Tq, and I'm sure there's more. Please apply at WP:GOCE for a copyedit. Yoninah (talk) 15:47, 16 November 2020 (UTC)
  • Hi Yoninah, Thanks a lot. I have requested for help on WP:GOCE on 3rd November 2020. I'll ping you once the issues with this article get resolved. Thanks and regards - Pratyk321 (talk)
  • Template:Ping It seems copyedit is completed. See the latest revision. — Amkgp 💬 17:29, 8 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Great, the copyedit has been completed and the article is now readable. But the hooks need more work. The ALT0 hook gives no context to what you're talking about. ALT1 does not explain what a "seat" is. ALT2 is not a hook, but a statement. Can you think of a different hook angle? I could help with suggestions if you'd like. Yoninah (talk) 20:44, 8 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Hi Yoninah (talk), Thanks for writing back. I have added to context to ALT1 "seat". Could you please help me with ALT0 & ALT2 hooks? Thanks Pratyk321 (talk)
  • Template:Ping Please don't overwrite the hooks. It makes it impossible to follow the discussion. I restored the thread and renumbered your new hooks. Yoninah (talk) 11:54, 9 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Template:Ping, thanks I'll keep this in mind. Could you please review review the hooks and please help me with more suitable ALT0a & ALT2a hooks? Thanks in advance Pratyk321 (talk)
  • Cropped image for DYK:
Panchkuta basadi, Humcha
Panchkuta basadi, Humcha
  • Hi Yoninah (talk), thanks for the suggestion. It looks good. However, I feel ALT0a & ALT1a could add a interesting backstory and importance perceptive respectively to the article. Please let me know your thoughts on this? Regards Pratyk321 (talk)
  • Template:Re How about this below? I tried to compose both of your ideas into one and the hook is of length 199 words. — Amkgp 💬 06:24, 11 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Thank you for the suggestion, Template:U, but there are too many facts in that hook. I'd also like to note that all these Indian words will not be recognizable by our English-speaking audience. ALT0a is telling a story without any context; it also needs grammatical help. If Template:U wants to go with ALT1a, that's fine, but it also is very geocentric and probably won't be of interest to most readers. Yoninah (talk) 11:31, 11 December 2020 (UTC)