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| − | :* | + | :* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Length and date OK. Citation for hook checks out. Image file checks out. It's a notable subject and I like the hook. Just a bit of tidying up to do. Please correct the disambig links in the article to "attorney", "tanner" and "Derby Academy". The external-links checker flags up citation no.12, although I cannot personally see what the problem is; the link works OK - might be worth checking with an expert or admin. Please change "practiced" to "practised". In the Personal Life section, the word "also" is used four times - could you rephrase some of this please? This is fundamentally a nicely researched and worthwhile article, so worth scrubbing up to look its best.--[[User:Storye book|Storye book]] ([[User talk:Storye book|talk]]) 11:44, 8 March 2014 (UTC) |
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John J. Loud
- ... that in addition to inventing and patenting the first ballpoint pen, John J. Loud (pictured) also held a patent for a firecracker cannon?
- Reviewed: in progress
Created by Connormah (talk). Self nominated at 08:20, 8 March 2014 (UTC).
Length and date OK. Citation for hook checks out. Image file checks out. It's a notable subject and I like the hook. Just a bit of tidying up to do. Please correct the disambig links in the article to "attorney", "tanner" and "Derby Academy". The external-links checker flags up citation no.12, although I cannot personally see what the problem is; the link works OK - might be worth checking with an expert or admin. Please change "practiced" to "practised". In the Personal Life section, the word "also" is used four times - could you rephrase some of this please? This is fundamentally a nicely researched and worthwhile article, so worth scrubbing up to look its best.--Storye book (talk) 11:44, 8 March 2014 (UTC)
