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− | {{*mp}}... that 2012 Australian Olympian '''[[Melissa Breen]]''' ran an Olympic B qualifying time of 11.38 seconds nine times in the [[100_metres#Women|100 metres]] before finally running an Olympic A Qualifying time of 11.29 seconds? | + | {{*mp}}... that 2012 Australian Olympian '''[[Melissa Breen]]''' ran an Olympic B qualifying time of 11.38 seconds nine times in the [[100_metres#Women|100 metres]] <s>before finally running an Olympic A Qualifying time of 11.29 seconds</s>? |
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:*[[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Article is long enough and new enough. Not sure the hook fact is accurately phrased though. The hook suggests to me that she ran the distance in exactly 11.38 seconds nine times. The source notes: "Breen, who bettered the Olympic B-qualifying time of 11.38sec on nine occasions this season during which she said she raced 27 times over 100m." An alt that is directly supported by the source is suggested below for your consideration. [[User:Cbl62|Cbl62]] ([[User talk:Cbl62|talk]]) 17:20, 3 July 2012 (UTC) | :*[[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Article is long enough and new enough. Not sure the hook fact is accurately phrased though. The hook suggests to me that she ran the distance in exactly 11.38 seconds nine times. The source notes: "Breen, who bettered the Olympic B-qualifying time of 11.38sec on nine occasions this season during which she said she raced 27 times over 100m." An alt that is directly supported by the source is suggested below for your consideration. [[User:Cbl62|Cbl62]] ([[User talk:Cbl62|talk]]) 17:20, 3 July 2012 (UTC) | ||
− | ::* '''alt 1''' ... that Australian Olympian '''[[Melissa Breen]]''' ran the [[100_metres#Women|100 metres]] 27 times in 2012 before finally running an Olympic A qualifying time of 11.29 seconds? [[User:Cbl62|Cbl62]] ([[User talk:Cbl62|talk]]) 17:20, 3 July 2012 (UTC) | + | ::* '''alt 1''' ... that Australian Olympian '''[[Melissa Breen]]''' ran the [[100_metres#Women|100 metres]] 27 times in 2012 <s>before finally running an Olympic A qualifying time of 11.29 seconds</s>? [[User:Cbl62|Cbl62]] ([[User talk:Cbl62|talk]]) 17:20, 3 July 2012 (UTC) |
::: *Laura -- Let me know if the alt seems reasonable and accurate to you. [[User:Cbl62|Cbl62]] ([[User talk:Cbl62|talk]]) 20:24, 3 July 2012 (UTC) | ::: *Laura -- Let me know if the alt seems reasonable and accurate to you. [[User:Cbl62|Cbl62]] ([[User talk:Cbl62|talk]]) 20:24, 3 July 2012 (UTC) | ||
::::: * Alt1 is fine with me. She's local to me and her repeated attempts made a lot of local news. That was why I thought that bit was interesting. :) 27 could probably be more interesting than 9. ;) --[[User:LauraHale|LauraHale]] ([[User talk:LauraHale|talk]]) 21:16, 3 July 2012 (UTC) | ::::: * Alt1 is fine with me. She's local to me and her repeated attempts made a lot of local news. That was why I thought that bit was interesting. :) 27 could probably be more interesting than 9. ;) --[[User:LauraHale|LauraHale]] ([[User talk:LauraHale|talk]]) 21:16, 3 July 2012 (UTC) |
Revision as of 22:17, 31 July 2012
Melissa Breen
- ... that 2012 Australian Olympian Melissa Breen ran an Olympic B qualifying time of 11.38 seconds nine times in the 100 metres
before finally running an Olympic A Qualifying time of 11.29 seconds?
- Reviewed: The Churchill Hotel
Created/expanded by LauraHale (talk). Self nom at 12:53, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
Article is long enough and new enough. Not sure the hook fact is accurately phrased though. The hook suggests to me that she ran the distance in exactly 11.38 seconds nine times. The source notes: "Breen, who bettered the Olympic B-qualifying time of 11.38sec on nine occasions this season during which she said she raced 27 times over 100m." An alt that is directly supported by the source is suggested below for your consideration. Cbl62 (talk) 17:20, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
- alt 1 ... that Australian Olympian Melissa Breen ran the 100 metres 27 times in 2012
before finally running an Olympic A qualifying time of 11.29 seconds? Cbl62 (talk) 17:20, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
- alt 1 ... that Australian Olympian Melissa Breen ran the 100 metres 27 times in 2012
Approved as to alt 1 only. Since I did both the review and came up with the alt hook, I suggest that the person promoting the hook to the prep area also satisfy themselves that the alt is supported by the in-line citation. Cbl62 (talk) 05:28, 7 July 2012 (UTC)
My reading of the cited source indicates that she was officially never better than two-thousandths of a second off the qualifying time. That's also what I get from this source (not cited in the article). Furthermore, this Canberra news story confusingly indicates that she didn't go to London because her 4x100 relay team wasn't in the top 16, but this page lists her in the Olympics 100 meters. --Orlady (talk) 21:39, 28 July 2012 (UTC)
- The article would need to be edited, too, but I think we could do this hook:
- ALT2 ... that Australian Olympian Melissa Breen ran the 100 metres 27 times in 2012 trying to achieve an Olympic A qualifying time of 11.29 seconds? --Orlady (talk) 21:43, 28 July 2012 (UTC)
- The article would need to be edited, too, but I think we could do this hook: