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| − | * ... that an officer | + | * ... that an officer appointed by [[North-Eastern Area Command (RAAF)|North-Eastern Area Command]] to investigate [[Vultee Vengeance]] accidents at '''[[No. 75 Wing RAAF]]''' crash-landed in a Vengeance on his return? |
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<small>Improved to Good Article status by [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]). Self-nominated at 11:37, 19 July 2016 (UTC).</small> | <small>Improved to Good Article status by [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]). Self-nominated at 11:37, 19 July 2016 (UTC).</small> | ||
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:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Long enough, hook is interesting and sourced. No close paraphrasing or neutrality detected. Passed GAN a week ago. QPQ done. I think the word 'appointed' is preferable that the word 'brought' and reconsidering the arrangement of words and other wording which makes the hook; ''... that an officer appointed to investigate [[Vultee Vengeance]] accidents at '''[[No. 75 Wing RAAF]]''', got crash-landed himself while in a Vengeance when he left?''. Besides that everything seems fine. Regards, <span style="background:Gainsboro">[[User:Krishna Chaitanya Velaga|<font color="#FF9933">'''KC'''</font><font color="white">'''Velaga'''</font> ]][[User Talk:KC97|<font color="#128807"><sub>☚╣✉╠☛</sub></font>]] </span> 15:14, 21 July 2016 (UTC) | :* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Long enough, hook is interesting and sourced. No close paraphrasing or neutrality detected. Passed GAN a week ago. QPQ done. I think the word 'appointed' is preferable that the word 'brought' and reconsidering the arrangement of words and other wording which makes the hook; ''... that an officer appointed to investigate [[Vultee Vengeance]] accidents at '''[[No. 75 Wing RAAF]]''', got crash-landed himself while in a Vengeance when he left?''. Besides that everything seems fine. Regards, <span style="background:Gainsboro">[[User:Krishna Chaitanya Velaga|<font color="#FF9933">'''KC'''</font><font color="white">'''Velaga'''</font> ]][[User Talk:KC97|<font color="#128807"><sub>☚╣✉╠☛</sub></font>]] </span> 15:14, 21 July 2016 (UTC) | ||
| − | + | ::*Actually I hadn't got round to the QPQ but have now. I definitely agree "appointed" but one doesn't "get" crash-landed so I don't think we should use that. The "himself" was to highlight the irony but I guess we can lose it if it reads oddly. See how the new version looks... Cheers, [[User:Ian Rose|Ian Rose]] ([[User talk:Ian Rose|talk]]) 16:35, 21 July 2016 (UTC) | |
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No. 75 Wing RAAF
- ... that an officer appointed by North-Eastern Area Command to investigate Vultee Vengeance accidents at No. 75 Wing RAAF crash-landed in a Vengeance on his return?
- Reviewed: Dynamism of a Dog on a Leash
Improved to Good Article status by Ian Rose (talk). Self-nominated at 11:37, 19 July 2016 (UTC).
Long enough, hook is interesting and sourced. No close paraphrasing or neutrality detected. Passed GAN a week ago. QPQ done. I think the word 'appointed' is preferable that the word 'brought' and reconsidering the arrangement of words and other wording which makes the hook; ... that an officer appointed to investigate Vultee Vengeance accidents at No. 75 Wing RAAF, got crash-landed himself while in a Vengeance when he left?. Besides that everything seems fine. Regards, KCVelaga ☚╣✉╠☛ 15:14, 21 July 2016 (UTC)
- Actually I hadn't got round to the QPQ but have now. I definitely agree "appointed" but one doesn't "get" crash-landed so I don't think we should use that. The "himself" was to highlight the irony but I guess we can lose it if it reads oddly. See how the new version looks... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 16:35, 21 July 2016 (UTC)