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[[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] This is a really fascinating and detailed article. I found some grammar awkwardness that should be clarified: | [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] This is a really fascinating and detailed article. I found some grammar awkwardness that should be clarified: | ||
| − | *" ... the aircraft had suffered a | + | *" ... the aircraft had suffered a runaway propeller as it departed San Francisco ... " Was there something wrong with the propeller? |
*:''Runaway propellers had been described in the last paragraph of the Aircraft section before I added the citation about the San Francisco incident, overlooking the fact that I hadn't yet defined what a runaway propeller was. I moved the section describing the overall history of the Stratocruisers, which includes defining what a runaway propeller is, to the second paragraph of that section.'' | *:''Runaway propellers had been described in the last paragraph of the Aircraft section before I added the citation about the San Francisco incident, overlooking the fact that I hadn't yet defined what a runaway propeller was. I moved the section describing the overall history of the Stratocruisers, which includes defining what a runaway propeller is, to the second paragraph of that section.'' | ||
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Please let me know. [[User:Maile66|— Maile ]] ([[User talk:Maile66|talk]]) 16:14, 31 August 2019 (UTC) | Please let me know. [[User:Maile66|— Maile ]] ([[User talk:Maile66|talk]]) 16:14, 31 August 2019 (UTC) | ||
:Thank you, I have made the edits described above. [[User:RecycledPixels|RecycledPixels]] ([[User talk:RecycledPixels|talk]]) 16:05, 3 September 2019 (UTC) | :Thank you, I have made the edits described above. [[User:RecycledPixels|RecycledPixels]] ([[User talk:RecycledPixels|talk]]) 16:05, 3 September 2019 (UTC) | ||
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| + | [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] Good job. This nomination passes. [[User:Maile66|— Maile ]] ([[User talk:Maile66|talk]]) 16:08, 3 September 2019 (UTC) | ||
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Revision as of 16:09, 3 September 2019
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Pan Am Flight 7
- ... that the cause of the crash of Pan Am Flight 7 was never able to be determined? Source: CAB report
- ALT1:... that the week-long search for Pan Am Flight 7 was the largest search and rescue operation in the Pacific Ocean at the time? Source: San Francisco Examiner 16 Jan 1958
5x expanded by RecycledPixels (talk). Self-nominated at 19:12, 21 August 2019 (UTC).
- Review by Maile
- QPQ
- No QPQ needed, not enough previous nominations
- Eligibility
- DYK Check tool verifies 321102 characters (3621 words) "readable prose size". 2049 characters prior to 5X expansion that began on August 17
- Sourcing
- All verifiable sourcing used.
- Hook
- Hooks sourcing verified
- Original hook is 78 characters
- ALT1 is 122 characters
- Images
- Hook image is in the article, uploaded on Commons and licensed
- Copyvio check
- Spot check shows no issues of concern
- Earwig's tool shows no issues of concern
This is a really fascinating and detailed article. I found some grammar awkwardness that should be clarified:
- " ... the aircraft had suffered a runaway propeller as it departed San Francisco ... " Was there something wrong with the propeller?
- Runaway propellers had been described in the last paragraph of the Aircraft section before I added the citation about the San Francisco incident, overlooking the fact that I hadn't yet defined what a runaway propeller was. I moved the section describing the overall history of the Stratocruisers, which includes defining what a runaway propeller is, to the second paragraph of that section.
- " ... and centrifugal force forces ... " Awkward wording.
- Agreed. I changed that.
- " ... had been flying with the company since 1942 since his graduation ... " Perhaps, " ... since his 1942 graduation ..."
- Agreed. Another instance of writing and rewriting to add and move information around.
- "As soon as the aircraft was reported missing and all fuel supplies had been exhausted ... " Whose fuel supplies?
- The missing aircraft. I reworded that sentence to more clearly state that.
Please let me know. — Maile (talk) 16:14, 31 August 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you, I have made the edits described above. RecycledPixels (talk) 16:05, 3 September 2019 (UTC)
Good job. This nomination passes. — Maile (talk) 16:08, 3 September 2019 (UTC)
