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:* Article is new enough, long enough and written in a suitably encyclopedic way with copious inline references. The text is original. This is a [[WP:BLP|BLP]] about a sometimes controversial figure but the article is carefully worded. QPQ done. I don't like ALT1 because future predictions can be upset ("life comes at you fast") but the first hook is a definite fact, interesting, and cited appropriately in the article. I worry that people reading quickly might get the impression the Co-operative Group employs people who are ''in'' modern slavery, rather than people who have escaped it. It would be a wrong reading, but I want to be certain that this misunderstanding won't happen. Could we have a variation of the hook that refers to "former victims" or "escapees"? [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] [[User:MartinPoulter|MartinPoulter]] ([[User talk:MartinPoulter|talk]]) 10:48, 21 July 2020 (UTC)
 
:* Article is new enough, long enough and written in a suitably encyclopedic way with copious inline references. The text is original. This is a [[WP:BLP|BLP]] about a sometimes controversial figure but the article is carefully worded. QPQ done. I don't like ALT1 because future predictions can be upset ("life comes at you fast") but the first hook is a definite fact, interesting, and cited appropriately in the article. I worry that people reading quickly might get the impression the Co-operative Group employs people who are ''in'' modern slavery, rather than people who have escaped it. It would be a wrong reading, but I want to be certain that this misunderstanding won't happen. Could we have a variation of the hook that refers to "former victims" or "escapees"? [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] [[User:MartinPoulter|MartinPoulter]] ([[User talk:MartinPoulter|talk]]) 10:48, 21 July 2020 (UTC)
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::* '''ALT2''': ... that '''[[Pippa Wicks]]''', the deputy [[chief executive officer]] of [[The Co-operative Group]], has supported the company's initiative to employ people who have escaped [[Slavery in the 21st century|modern slavery]]?
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::* {{U|MartinPoulter}} Is ALT2 clearer? [[User:Joseph2302|<b style="color:#CCCC00">Joseph</b>]][[User talk:Joseph2302|<b style="color:#00FF00">2302</b>]] ([[User talk:Joseph2302|talk)]] 10:54, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
  
 
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Pippa Wicks

Created by Joseph2302 (talk) and Edwardx (talk). Nominated by Joseph2302 (talk) at 22:49, 30 June 2020 (UTC).

  • Article is new enough, long enough and written in a suitably encyclopedic way with copious inline references. The text is original. This is a BLP about a sometimes controversial figure but the article is carefully worded. QPQ done. I don't like ALT1 because future predictions can be upset ("life comes at you fast") but the first hook is a definite fact, interesting, and cited appropriately in the article. I worry that people reading quickly might get the impression the Co-operative Group employs people who are in modern slavery, rather than people who have escaped it. It would be a wrong reading, but I want to be certain that this misunderstanding won't happen. Could we have a variation of the hook that refers to "former victims" or "escapees"? Symbol question.svg MartinPoulter (talk) 10:48, 21 July 2020 (UTC)