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:I prefer the original, as I think the progression from being a young chemistry klutz to winning the Nobel Prize is what gives the hook its punch. [[User:Antony-22|Antony&ndash;'''''22''''']] (<sup>[[User talk:Antony-22|talk]]</sup>⁄<sub>[[Special:Contributions/Antony-22|contribs]]</sub>) 03:16, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
 
:I prefer the original, as I think the progression from being a young chemistry klutz to winning the Nobel Prize is what gives the hook its punch. [[User:Antony-22|Antony&ndash;'''''22''''']] (<sup>[[User talk:Antony-22|talk]]</sup>⁄<sub>[[Special:Contributions/Antony-22|contribs]]</sub>) 03:16, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
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::It's entirely up to you, but let me say this. There's an incongruity (which is what we're after) whether you work from Nobel to klutz or klutz to Nobel. But a kid ruining his mom's stove is more unexpected than a Nobel prize winner (DYK being full of Nobel prize winners, war heroes, and so on) so the stove makes the better punchline. IMO of course.
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::The presence of the image makes this even more true, because the hook as you have it reads CHILD - GROWNUP (pictured) - MOM'S STOVE - NOBEL i.e. it jumps back and forth in time instead of working up to the punchline. See my point?  [[User:EEng|EEng]] ([[User talk:EEng|talk]]) 06:01, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
  
 
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Robert Curl

Robert Curl in 2009

5x expanded by Antony-22 (talk). Self nominated at 03:34, 13 July 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg Sufficiently expanded and meets core policies. Spotchecks on the refs were mostly OK. Hook is cited and just inside the 200-character mark. --Jakob (talk) 17:55, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

I think as a child and some other bits can be omitted as things the reader will infer.

Further, I wonder if Buckminsterfullerene was omitted for length reasons -- it fits now and will attract interest, I think:

EEng (talk) 23:22, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

I prefer the original, as I think the progression from being a young chemistry klutz to winning the Nobel Prize is what gives the hook its punch. Antony–22 (talkcontribs) 03:16, 14 July 2014 (UTC)
It's entirely up to you, but let me say this. There's an incongruity (which is what we're after) whether you work from Nobel to klutz or klutz to Nobel. But a kid ruining his mom's stove is more unexpected than a Nobel prize winner (DYK being full of Nobel prize winners, war heroes, and so on) so the stove makes the better punchline. IMO of course.
The presence of the image makes this even more true, because the hook as you have it reads CHILD - GROWNUP (pictured) - MOM'S STOVE - NOBEL i.e. it jumps back and forth in time instead of working up to the punchline. See my point? EEng (talk) 06:01, 14 July 2014 (UTC)