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::::I just tweaked the hook a little to read "helped to spur," adding "helped to." Or we could say that it "contributed to the movement to end a 20-year-old..." [[User:Coretheapple|Coretheapple]] ([[User talk:Coretheapple|talk]]) 13:09, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 
::::I just tweaked the hook a little to read "helped to spur," adding "helped to." Or we could say that it "contributed to the movement to end a 20-year-old..." [[User:Coretheapple|Coretheapple]] ([[User talk:Coretheapple|talk]]) 13:09, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 
:::::Helped to spur sounds fine to me - 'contributed to the movement to end' sounds rather clumsy and overly long... Thanks. [[User:Mike Peel|Mike Peel]] ([[User talk:Mike Peel|talk]]) 18:57, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 
:::::Helped to spur sounds fine to me - 'contributed to the movement to end' sounds rather clumsy and overly long... Thanks. [[User:Mike Peel|Mike Peel]] ([[User talk:Mike Peel|talk]]) 18:57, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
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::::::FWIW, '''the''' California's Salinas Valley sounds very odd and unnecessary.  Can you remove "the"? [[User:Viriditas|Viriditas]] ([[User talk:Viriditas|talk]]) 21:55, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 
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1963 Chualar bus crash

Created by Coretheapple (talk). Self nominated at 23:18, 7 March 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg Broadly looks good to me. Long enough, interesting referenced hook. However, the image needs a fair use rationale adding for its inclusion in this article. It would be nice to see a picture of the location of the crash if one's available anywhere on Commons. Thanks. Mike Peel (talk) 17:41, 8 March 2014 (UTC)
You're right. I'm about to take out that image as its fair-use criteria is insufficent for use in this article unfortunately. It's clearly an old picture, and since not copyrighted it is probably in the PD. However, I'm going to be away for a few days so I don't have time to investigate that further. No, was unable to find a picture, but I'm trying. There are some newspaper front pages that may be usable but I'm not familiar with use of such images. By the way I've gotten hold of the Congressional investigative report on the tragedy, and am using it to expand the article and correct facts. However, this won't affect the hook. Coretheapple (talk) 18:04, 8 March 2014 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg Thanks - it now looks good to go to me. Mike Peel (talk) 19:03, 8 March 2014 (UTC)
Thanks, Mike. By the way, I see from the congressional probe that two of the casualties were non-Mexican transients. However, they were not killed, so this does not affect the hook. Coretheapple (talk) 19:34, 8 March 2014 (UTC)
I just tweaked the hook a little to read "helped to spur," adding "helped to." Or we could say that it "contributed to the movement to end a 20-year-old..." Coretheapple (talk) 13:09, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
Helped to spur sounds fine to me - 'contributed to the movement to end' sounds rather clumsy and overly long... Thanks. Mike Peel (talk) 18:57, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
FWIW, the California's Salinas Valley sounds very odd and unnecessary. Can you remove "the"? Viriditas (talk) 21:55, 9 March 2014 (UTC)