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::*I didn't review the article, but the hook looks self-evident enough. [[User:SL93|SL93]] ([[User talk:SL93|talk]]) 02:17, 10 July 2013 (UTC)
 
::*I didn't review the article, but the hook looks self-evident enough. [[User:SL93|SL93]] ([[User talk:SL93|talk]]) 02:17, 10 July 2013 (UTC)
 
::*I'm a little unsure a reader outside the US will be able to parse this quickly enough, though I worked out what it was talking about because "pit road" is contextually similar enough to "pit lane" as used in [[Formula 1]] to understand it. [[User:Ritchie333|<font color="#7F007F">'''Ritchie333'''</font>]] [[User talk:Ritchie333|<font color="#7F007F"><sup>(talk)</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Ritchie333|<font color="#7F007F"><sup>(cont)</sup></font>]]  10:02, 11 July 2013 (UTC)
 
::*I'm a little unsure a reader outside the US will be able to parse this quickly enough, though I worked out what it was talking about because "pit road" is contextually similar enough to "pit lane" as used in [[Formula 1]] to understand it. [[User:Ritchie333|<font color="#7F007F">'''Ritchie333'''</font>]] [[User talk:Ritchie333|<font color="#7F007F"><sup>(talk)</sup></font>]] [[Special:Contributions/Ritchie333|<font color="#7F007F"><sup>(cont)</sup></font>]]  10:02, 11 July 2013 (UTC)
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:::*The source uses the phrase "pit road speeding penalty". I think "pit road" should be used in the article rather than "pit lane", if that's the term of art used for NASCAR; I also think you need to use "the" in the article and hook sentences, i.e., "speeding on the pit road". Once these are addressed, we can call for a full review; I don't think it makes sense to ask for a reviewer when this issue is still a snag preventing approval. [[User:BlueMoonset|BlueMoonset]] ([[User talk:BlueMoonset|talk]]) 18:39, 28 July 2013 (UTC)
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2001 Protection One 400

Created by ZappaOMati (talk). Self nominated at 04:25, 2 July 2013 (UTC).

  • Interesting hook and I think it could work with some more context. To someone who's not familiar with racing, I'm not sure if it would be self-evident that this was an auto race. Also, I don't believe "pit road" is a general knowledge term that non-fans would tend to know. CaseyPenk (talk) 17:43, 3 July 2013 (UTC)
  • I don't know about how self-evident it'd be, unless you go up to a random non-race fan and ask "did you watch the Blah 500?" or something. For pit road, I linked it, which could help people know what it is. ZappaOMati 19:52, 3 July 2013 (UTC)
  • I didn't review the article, but the hook looks self-evident enough. SL93 (talk) 02:17, 10 July 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm a little unsure a reader outside the US will be able to parse this quickly enough, though I worked out what it was talking about because "pit road" is contextually similar enough to "pit lane" as used in Formula 1 to understand it. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 10:02, 11 July 2013 (UTC)
  • The source uses the phrase "pit road speeding penalty". I think "pit road" should be used in the article rather than "pit lane", if that's the term of art used for NASCAR; I also think you need to use "the" in the article and hook sentences, i.e., "speeding on the pit road". Once these are addressed, we can call for a full review; I don't think it makes sense to ask for a reviewer when this issue is still a snag preventing approval. BlueMoonset (talk) 18:39, 28 July 2013 (UTC)