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* ... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''' worked as an academic and advised the new [[Scottish Parliament]] on governance, before becoming the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]? [https://www.timeshighereducation.com/news/scots-expect-shift-to-independence/109924.article http://www.institute-of-governance.ed.ac.uk/about ] [http://www.heraldscotland.com/news/12410093.She_apos_s_at_the_end_of_your_tether_Professor_Alice_Brown_manages_a_huge_challenge___and_a_budget_of__Pounds__2m___in_her_role_as_Scotland_apos_s_new_public_services_ombudsman__She_talked_to_Murray_Ritchie/]
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* <s>... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''' worked as an academic and advised the new [[Scottish Parliament]] on governance, before becoming the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]?</s>[https://www.timeshighereducation.com/news/scots-expect-shift-to-independence/109924.article http://www.institute-of-governance.ed.ac.uk/about ] [http://www.heraldscotland.com/news/12410093.She_apos_s_at_the_end_of_your_tether_Professor_Alice_Brown_manages_a_huge_challenge___and_a_budget_of__Pounds__2m___in_her_role_as_Scotland_apos_s_new_public_services_ombudsman__She_talked_to_Murray_Ritchie/]  
** '''ALT1''':... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''' was a professor of politics and advised the new [[Scottish Parliament]] on governance, then went on to become the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]? [https://www.timeshighereducation.com/news/scots-expect-shift-to-independence/109924.article http://www.institute-of-governance.ed.ac.uk/about ] [http://www.heraldscotland.com/news/12410093.She_apos_s_at_the_end_of_your_tether_Professor_Alice_Brown_manages_a_huge_challenge___and_a_budget_of__Pounds__2m___in_her_role_as_Scotland_apos_s_new_public_services_ombudsman__She_talked_to_Murray_Ritchie/]
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** '''ALT1''': ... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''' was a professor of politics and advised the new [[Scottish Parliament]] on governance, then went on to become the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]? [http://www.heraldscotland.com/news/12410093.She_apos_s_at_the_end_of_your_tether_Professor_Alice_Brown_manages_a_huge_challenge___and_a_budget_of__Pounds__2m___in_her_role_as_Scotland_apos_s_new_public_services_ombudsman__She_talked_to_Murray_Ritchie/]
 
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<small>Created by [[User:Drchriswilliams|Drchriswilliams]] ([[User talk:Drchriswilliams|talk]]). Self-nominated at 20:41, 14 January 2017 (UTC).</small>
 
<small>Created by [[User:Drchriswilliams|Drchriswilliams]] ([[User talk:Drchriswilliams|talk]]). Self-nominated at 20:41, 14 January 2017 (UTC).</small>
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: * [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Promising article on good sources, no copyvio obvious. A few questions: 1) The hook fact is supported by the refs here, but it must be in the article, with the precises ref right after the fact, three of them. The "first ombudsman" (no ombudswoman?) is in the lead, but not yet in the body. 2) Can you combine a few of those short paragraphs?
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:: I like ALT1, as more precise. What do you think of rewording it (note: no link to Scottish Parliament, - readers can find it in the article):
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:: '''ALT2''': ... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''', who was a professor of politics and advised the new Scottish Parliament on governance, went on to become the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]? --[[User:Gerda Arendt|Gerda Arendt]] ([[User talk:Gerda Arendt|talk]]) 12:43, 16 January 2017 (UTC)
  
 
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Alice Brown (ombudsman)

Created by Drchriswilliams (talk). Self-nominated at 20:41, 14 January 2017 (UTC).

* Symbol question.svg Promising article on good sources, no copyvio obvious. A few questions: 1) The hook fact is supported by the refs here, but it must be in the article, with the precises ref right after the fact, three of them. The "first ombudsman" (no ombudswoman?) is in the lead, but not yet in the body. 2) Can you combine a few of those short paragraphs?
I like ALT1, as more precise. What do you think of rewording it (note: no link to Scottish Parliament, - readers can find it in the article):
ALT2: ... that Alice Brown, who was a professor of politics and advised the new Scottish Parliament on governance, went on to become the first Scottish Public Services Ombudsman? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:43, 16 January 2017 (UTC)