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The result was: '''promoted''' by [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 19:19, 22 January 2017 (UTC)<br />
 
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====Alice Brown (ombudsman)====
 
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* <s>... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''' worked as an academic and advised the new [[Scottish Parliament]] on governance, before becoming the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]?</s>[https://www.timeshighereducation.com/news/scots-expect-shift-to-independence/109924.article http://www.institute-of-governance.ed.ac.uk/about ] [http://www.heraldscotland.com/news/12410093.She_apos_s_at_the_end_of_your_tether_Professor_Alice_Brown_manages_a_huge_challenge___and_a_budget_of__Pounds__2m___in_her_role_as_Scotland_apos_s_new_public_services_ombudsman__She_talked_to_Murray_Ritchie/]  
 
* <s>... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''' worked as an academic and advised the new [[Scottish Parliament]] on governance, before becoming the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]?</s>[https://www.timeshighereducation.com/news/scots-expect-shift-to-independence/109924.article http://www.institute-of-governance.ed.ac.uk/about ] [http://www.heraldscotland.com/news/12410093.She_apos_s_at_the_end_of_your_tether_Professor_Alice_Brown_manages_a_huge_challenge___and_a_budget_of__Pounds__2m___in_her_role_as_Scotland_apos_s_new_public_services_ombudsman__She_talked_to_Murray_Ritchie/]  
 
** '''ALT1''': <s>... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''' was a professor of politics and advised the new [[Scottish Parliament]] on governance, then went on to become the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]?</s>  [http://www.heraldscotland.com/news/12410093.She_apos_s_at_the_end_of_your_tether_Professor_Alice_Brown_manages_a_huge_challenge___and_a_budget_of__Pounds__2m___in_her_role_as_Scotland_apos_s_new_public_services_ombudsman__She_talked_to_Murray_Ritchie/]
 
** '''ALT1''': <s>... that '''[[Alice Brown (ombudsman)|Alice Brown]]''' was a professor of politics and advised the new [[Scottish Parliament]] on governance, then went on to become the first [[Scottish Public Services Ombudsman]]?</s>  [http://www.heraldscotland.com/news/12410093.She_apos_s_at_the_end_of_your_tether_Professor_Alice_Brown_manages_a_huge_challenge___and_a_budget_of__Pounds__2m___in_her_role_as_Scotland_apos_s_new_public_services_ombudsman__She_talked_to_Murray_Ritchie/]
 
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<small>Created by [[User:Drchriswilliams|Drchriswilliams]] ([[User talk:Drchriswilliams|talk]]). Self-nominated at 20:41, 14 January 2017 (UTC).</small>
 
<small>Created by [[User:Drchriswilliams|Drchriswilliams]] ([[User talk:Drchriswilliams|talk]]). Self-nominated at 20:41, 14 January 2017 (UTC).</small>
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: * [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Promising article on good sources, no copyvio obvious. A few questions: 1) The hook fact is supported by the refs here, but it must be in the article, with the precises ref right after the fact, three of them. The "first ombudsman" (no ombudswoman?) is in the lead, but not yet in the body. 2) Can you combine a few of those short paragraphs?
 
: * [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Promising article on good sources, no copyvio obvious. A few questions: 1) The hook fact is supported by the refs here, but it must be in the article, with the precises ref right after the fact, three of them. The "first ombudsman" (no ombudswoman?) is in the lead, but not yet in the body. 2) Can you combine a few of those short paragraphs?
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:::*{{reply to|Gerda Arendt}} I'm happy with ALT2. I have made some edits to the article to address the points raised. I have added further subsections, tidied up the academic part of her career and referenced it further, provided a brief note of some debate relating to the ombudsman title. [[User:Drchriswilliams|Drchriswilliams]] ([[User talk:Drchriswilliams|talk]]) 21:22, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 
:::*{{reply to|Gerda Arendt}} I'm happy with ALT2. I have made some edits to the article to address the points raised. I have added further subsections, tidied up the academic part of her career and referenced it further, provided a brief note of some debate relating to the ombudsman title. [[User:Drchriswilliams|Drchriswilliams]] ([[User talk:Drchriswilliams|talk]]) 21:22, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 
::::: [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] Great, thank you! - I trust that you will also combine a few of the many short sentences in the academic section, all beginning with "She" ;) --[[User:Gerda Arendt|Gerda Arendt]] ([[User talk:Gerda Arendt|talk]]) 21:40, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 
::::: [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] Great, thank you! - I trust that you will also combine a few of the many short sentences in the academic section, all beginning with "She" ;) --[[User:Gerda Arendt|Gerda Arendt]] ([[User talk:Gerda Arendt|talk]]) 21:40, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
:::::: Yes, I have tidied this bit up. [[User:Drchriswilliams|Drchriswilliams]] ([[User talk:Drchriswilliams|talk]]) 14:00, 18 January 2017 (UTC)
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Latest revision as of 19:19, 22 January 2017

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 19:19, 22 January 2017 (UTC)

Alice Brown (ombudsman)

Created by Drchriswilliams (talk). Self-nominated at 20:41, 14 January 2017 (UTC).

* Symbol question.svg Promising article on good sources, no copyvio obvious. A few questions: 1) The hook fact is supported by the refs here, but it must be in the article, with the precises ref right after the fact, three of them. The "first ombudsman" (no ombudswoman?) is in the lead, but not yet in the body. 2) Can you combine a few of those short paragraphs?
I like ALT1, as more precise. What do you think of rewording it (note: no link to Scottish Parliament, - readers can find it in the article):
ALT2: ... that Alice Brown, who was a professor of politics and advised the new Scottish Parliament on governance, went on to become the first Scottish Public Services Ombudsman? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:43, 16 January 2017 (UTC)
  • Template:Reply to I'm happy with ALT2. I have made some edits to the article to address the points raised. I have added further subsections, tidied up the academic part of her career and referenced it further, provided a brief note of some debate relating to the ombudsman title. Drchriswilliams (talk) 21:22, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg Great, thank you! - I trust that you will also combine a few of the many short sentences in the academic section, all beginning with "She" ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:40, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
Yes, I have tidied this bit up. Drchriswilliams (talk) 14:00, 18 January 2017 (UTC)