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:* '''ALT4''': ... that [[Andrés Muschietti|'''Andrés Muschietti''']]'s short ''Mamá'' inspired [[Guillermo del Toro]], which he describes as "scariest," to executive produce the [[Mama (2013 film)|feature length ''Mama'']]? | :* '''ALT4''': ... that [[Andrés Muschietti|'''Andrés Muschietti''']]'s short ''Mamá'' inspired [[Guillermo del Toro]], which he describes as "scariest," to executive produce the [[Mama (2013 film)|feature length ''Mama'']]? | ||
::* {{ping|GregorB}} ALT4 is suggested. I've rewrite the fact in the article. --[[User:Captain Assassin!|<span style="font-variant:small-caps;color:Green;font-family:Trajan Pro;">'''''Captain Assassin!'''''</span>]] <sup><span style="color:Red;font-size:85%;">«[[User talk:Captain Assassin!|T]] ♦ [[Special:Contributions/Captain Assassin!|C]] ♦ [[User:Captain Assassin!/Guestbook|G]]»</span></sup> 18:45, 11 August 2015 (UTC) | ::* {{ping|GregorB}} ALT4 is suggested. I've rewrite the fact in the article. --[[User:Captain Assassin!|<span style="font-variant:small-caps;color:Green;font-family:Trajan Pro;">'''''Captain Assassin!'''''</span>]] <sup><span style="color:Red;font-size:85%;">«[[User talk:Captain Assassin!|T]] ♦ [[Special:Contributions/Captain Assassin!|C]] ♦ [[User:Captain Assassin!/Guestbook|G]]»</span></sup> 18:45, 11 August 2015 (UTC) | ||
| + | :::* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] I'm afraid that the current wording of the rewritten part is rather awkward, and so is ALT4. Also, ALT4 says "inspired", while the source says "attracted" and "convinced" - not quite the same. Please give me 48 hours to (hopefully) think of something. (Of course, you're welcome to make changes as you see fit.) [[User:GregorB|GregorB]] ([[User talk:GregorB|talk]]) 19:35, 12 August 2015 (UTC) | ||
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Andrés Muschietti
- ... that Andrés Muschietti's short Mamá with "scariest" scenes inspired Guillermo del Toro to make a feature length film?
- ALT1:... that 2013 film Mama was a directorial debut by Andrés Muschietti?
- Reviewed: First Battle of Tikrit
Created by Captain Assassin! (talk). Self-nominated at 12:09, 17 July 2015 (UTC).
- Will start the review within 48 hours. GregorB (talk) 17:24, 6 August 2015 (UTC)
- The article is new enough (created on July 17), and large enough (2800+ chars of prose).
- 16px The ALT1 hook is fairly uninteresting. The original hook is fine but may appear a bit confusing: the context of the "scariest" quote is unclear (the article makes it clear that these are del Toro's words). The del Toro's quote is genuinely interesting, so I'd suggest a minor rewrite of that part of the article (see article talk) and possibly a new hook, such as:
- ALT2:... that Guillermo del Toro described Andrés Muschietti's short Mamá as "one of the scariest ... I've ever seen"?
- ...or even:
- ALT3:... that Guillermo del Toro described Andrés Muschietti's short Mamá as "really, really scary"?
- ...or something along these lines. I'll continue the review later today. GregorB (talk) 10:05, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
- Okay, so: nothing wrong with the article's content and structure, no cleanup tags or outstanding issues. No BLP problems. Inline referencing throughout, valid sources.
- QPQ not done.
- 16px So taking care of hooks and QPQ still needed for promotion, fine in all other departments. GregorB (talk) 18:57, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
- Template:Ping QPQ is done. --Captain Assassin! «T ♦ C ♦ G» 02:07, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
- Template:U, QPQ is fine, but now we have the issue of hooks - ALT0 is a bit awkward, ALT1 is uninteresting, while ALT2 and 3 are not supported by the text (naturally, being just my suggestions). Would you agree with the suggestion in the article's talk? GregorB (talk) 18:25, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
- ALT4: ... that Andrés Muschietti's short Mamá inspired Guillermo del Toro, which he describes as "scariest," to executive produce the feature length Mama?
- Template:Ping ALT4 is suggested. I've rewrite the fact in the article. --Captain Assassin! «T ♦ C ♦ G» 18:45, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
- 16px I'm afraid that the current wording of the rewritten part is rather awkward, and so is ALT4. Also, ALT4 says "inspired", while the source says "attracted" and "convinced" - not quite the same. Please give me 48 hours to (hopefully) think of something. (Of course, you're welcome to make changes as you see fit.) GregorB (talk) 19:35, 12 August 2015 (UTC)