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:* The article is new enough (created on July 17), and large enough (2800+ chars of prose).
 
:* The article is new enough (created on July 17), and large enough (2800+ chars of prose).
 
:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] The ALT1 hook is fairly uninteresting. The original hook is fine but may appear a bit confusing: the context of the "scariest" quote is unclear (the article makes it clear that these are del Toro's words). The del Toro's quote is genuinely interesting, so I'd suggest a minor rewrite of that part of the article (see article talk) and possibly a new hook, such as:
 
:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] The ALT1 hook is fairly uninteresting. The original hook is fine but may appear a bit confusing: the context of the "scariest" quote is unclear (the article makes it clear that these are del Toro's words). The del Toro's quote is genuinely interesting, so I'd suggest a minor rewrite of that part of the article (see article talk) and possibly a new hook, such as:
::* '''ALT2''':... that [[Guillermo del Toro]] described [[Andrés Muschietti|'''Andrés Muschietti''']]'s short ''Mamá'' as "one of the scariest ... I've ever seen"?
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::* <s>'''ALT2''':... that [[Guillermo del Toro]] described [[Andrés Muschietti|'''Andrés Muschietti''']]'s short ''Mamá'' as "one of the scariest&nbsp;... I've ever seen"?</s>
 
:* ...or even:
 
:* ...or even:
::* '''ALT3''':... that [[Guillermo del Toro]] described [[Andrés Muschietti|'''Andrés Muschietti''']]'s short ''Mamá'' as "really, really scary"?
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::* <s>'''ALT3''':... that [[Guillermo del Toro]] described [[Andrés Muschietti|'''Andrés Muschietti''']]'s short ''Mamá'' as "really, really scary"?</s>
 
:*...or something along these lines. I'll continue the review later today. [[User:GregorB|GregorB]] ([[User talk:GregorB|talk]]) 10:05, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
 
:*...or something along these lines. I'll continue the review later today. [[User:GregorB|GregorB]] ([[User talk:GregorB|talk]]) 10:05, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
 
:* Okay, so: nothing wrong with the article's content and structure, no cleanup tags or outstanding issues. No BLP problems. Inline referencing throughout, valid sources.
 
:* Okay, so: nothing wrong with the article's content and structure, no cleanup tags or outstanding issues. No BLP problems. Inline referencing throughout, valid sources.
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::* {{ping|GregorB}} ALT4 is suggested. I've rewrite the fact in the article. --[[User:Captain Assassin!|<span style="font-variant:small-caps;color:Green;font-family:Trajan Pro;">'''''Captain Assassin!'''''</span>]] <sup><span style="color:Red;font-size:85%;">«[[User talk:Captain Assassin!|T]] ♦ [[Special:Contributions/Captain Assassin!|C]] ♦ [[User:Captain Assassin!/Guestbook|G]]»</span></sup> 18:45, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
 
::* {{ping|GregorB}} ALT4 is suggested. I've rewrite the fact in the article. --[[User:Captain Assassin!|<span style="font-variant:small-caps;color:Green;font-family:Trajan Pro;">'''''Captain Assassin!'''''</span>]] <sup><span style="color:Red;font-size:85%;">«[[User talk:Captain Assassin!|T]] ♦ [[Special:Contributions/Captain Assassin!|C]] ♦ [[User:Captain Assassin!/Guestbook|G]]»</span></sup> 18:45, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
 
:::* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] I'm afraid that the current wording of the rewritten part is rather awkward, and so is ALT4. Also, ALT4 says  "inspired", while the source says "attracted" and "convinced" - not quite the same. Please give me 48 hours to (hopefully) think of something. (Of course, you're welcome to make changes as you see fit.) [[User:GregorB|GregorB]] ([[User talk:GregorB|talk]]) 19:35, 12 August 2015 (UTC)
 
:::* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] I'm afraid that the current wording of the rewritten part is rather awkward, and so is ALT4. Also, ALT4 says  "inspired", while the source says "attracted" and "convinced" - not quite the same. Please give me 48 hours to (hopefully) think of something. (Of course, you're welcome to make changes as you see fit.) [[User:GregorB|GregorB]] ([[User talk:GregorB|talk]]) 19:35, 12 August 2015 (UTC)
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::::* [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]]}} Okay, I've tweaked the article's wording and changed "inspired" to "attracted" in ALT4. I've crossed out hooks which are not applicable. The article is fine (I've also made spotchecks for close paraphrasing, which I've forgotten to mention), the hooks are generally fine (I hope - I still feel some of them are awkward, but I couldn't really think of anything better at this point), so this should be good to go then. [[User:GregorB|GregorB]] ([[User talk:GregorB|talk]]) 18:35, 16 August 2015 (UTC)
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Revision as of 18:35, 16 August 2015

Andrés Muschietti

Created by Captain Assassin! (talk). Self-nominated at 12:09, 17 July 2015 (UTC).

  • Will start the review within 48 hours. GregorB (talk) 17:24, 6 August 2015 (UTC)
  • The article is new enough (created on July 17), and large enough (2800+ chars of prose).
  • Symbol question.svg The ALT1 hook is fairly uninteresting. The original hook is fine but may appear a bit confusing: the context of the "scariest" quote is unclear (the article makes it clear that these are del Toro's words). The del Toro's quote is genuinely interesting, so I'd suggest a minor rewrite of that part of the article (see article talk) and possibly a new hook, such as:
  • ...or even:
  • ...or something along these lines. I'll continue the review later today. GregorB (talk) 10:05, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
  • Okay, so: nothing wrong with the article's content and structure, no cleanup tags or outstanding issues. No BLP problems. Inline referencing throughout, valid sources.
  • QPQ not done.
  • Symbol question.svg So taking care of hooks and QPQ still needed for promotion, fine in all other departments. GregorB (talk) 18:57, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
  • Template:U, QPQ is fine, but now we have the issue of hooks - ALT0 is a bit awkward, ALT1 is uninteresting, while ALT2 and 3 are not supported by the text (naturally, being just my suggestions). Would you agree with the suggestion in the article's talk? GregorB (talk) 18:25, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg I'm afraid that the current wording of the rewritten part is rather awkward, and so is ALT4. Also, ALT4 says "inspired", while the source says "attracted" and "convinced" - not quite the same. Please give me 48 hours to (hopefully) think of something. (Of course, you're welcome to make changes as you see fit.) GregorB (talk) 19:35, 12 August 2015 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Okay, I've tweaked the article's wording and changed "inspired" to "attracted" in ALT4. I've crossed out hooks which are not applicable. The article is fine (I've also made spotchecks for close paraphrasing, which I've forgotten to mention), the hooks are generally fine (I hope - I still feel some of them are awkward, but I couldn't really think of anything better at this point), so this should be good to go then. GregorB (talk) 18:35, 16 August 2015 (UTC)