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:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] The article became a GA on the 22nd and is clearly long enough, and the hook format doesn't present any issues. However, I see a couple of issues with the hook fact in the article. First, the article says that "Trainers wanted the cheetah to chase a toy", but I'm not sure the source makes that explicit enough; it just says the cheetah was supposed to chase a toy, without mentioning who wanted it to. Second, and more concerning, the hook fact is closely paraphrased to the source. The article says: "The premise of the event was to prove a cheetah could beat a human in a 100-yard dash, even if the human had a five-second head start." Source: "in which it wanted to prove a cheetah was faster than a human, even if the human was given a five-second start." This is doubly concerning because the article is at FAC at the moment. [[User:Giants2008|<font color="blue">Giants2008</font>]] ([[User talk:Giants2008|<font color="darkblue">Talk</font>]]) 16:48, 25 December 2013 (UTC)
 
:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] The article became a GA on the 22nd and is clearly long enough, and the hook format doesn't present any issues. However, I see a couple of issues with the hook fact in the article. First, the article says that "Trainers wanted the cheetah to chase a toy", but I'm not sure the source makes that explicit enough; it just says the cheetah was supposed to chase a toy, without mentioning who wanted it to. Second, and more concerning, the hook fact is closely paraphrased to the source. The article says: "The premise of the event was to prove a cheetah could beat a human in a 100-yard dash, even if the human had a five-second head start." Source: "in which it wanted to prove a cheetah was faster than a human, even if the human was given a five-second start." This is doubly concerning because the article is at FAC at the moment. [[User:Giants2008|<font color="blue">Giants2008</font>]] ([[User talk:Giants2008|<font color="darkblue">Talk</font>]]) 16:48, 25 December 2013 (UTC)
 
::*Check the revisions [https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Billy_Bates_%28baseball%29&diff=587949513&oldid=587300991 here]. I did a c/e and changed the trainer issue to passive. Thanks for the review. [[User:Seattle|Seattle]] ([[User talk:Seattle|talk]]) 18:33, 27 December 2013 (UTC)
 
::*Check the revisions [https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Billy_Bates_%28baseball%29&diff=587949513&oldid=587300991 here]. I did a c/e and changed the trainer issue to passive. Thanks for the review. [[User:Seattle|Seattle]] ([[User talk:Seattle|talk]]) 18:33, 27 December 2013 (UTC)
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:::*[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] The fixes are satisfactory, and I didn't see any further paraphrasing issues upon checking a couple more sources. I think the article is good to go now. [[User:Giants2008|<font color="blue">Giants2008</font>]] ([[User talk:Giants2008|<font color="darkblue">Talk</font>]]) 17:10, 28 December 2013 (UTC)
 
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Billy Bates (baseball)

Improved to Good Article status by Seattle (talk). Self nominated at 21:11, 22 December 2013 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The article became a GA on the 22nd and is clearly long enough, and the hook format doesn't present any issues. However, I see a couple of issues with the hook fact in the article. First, the article says that "Trainers wanted the cheetah to chase a toy", but I'm not sure the source makes that explicit enough; it just says the cheetah was supposed to chase a toy, without mentioning who wanted it to. Second, and more concerning, the hook fact is closely paraphrased to the source. The article says: "The premise of the event was to prove a cheetah could beat a human in a 100-yard dash, even if the human had a five-second head start." Source: "in which it wanted to prove a cheetah was faster than a human, even if the human was given a five-second start." This is doubly concerning because the article is at FAC at the moment. Giants2008 (Talk) 16:48, 25 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Check the revisions here. I did a c/e and changed the trainer issue to passive. Thanks for the review. Seattle (talk) 18:33, 27 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg The fixes are satisfactory, and I didn't see any further paraphrasing issues upon checking a couple more sources. I think the article is good to go now. Giants2008 (Talk) 17:10, 28 December 2013 (UTC)