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* ... that Arsenal Ladies player '''[[Clare Wheatley]]''' took over club's development officer and general manager roles from [[Vic Akers]] after he had told her "Arsenal Ladies is not a social club"?  <small>Source: [https://womensfootballarchive.com/2015/12/13/players-clare-wheatley/ WFA]</small>
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* ... that football player '''[[Clare Wheatley]]''' took over as Arsenal Ladies' development officer and general manager roles from [[Vic Akers]] who had told her "Arsenal Ladies is not a social club"?  <small>Source: [https://womensfootballarchive.com/2015/12/13/players-clare-wheatley/ WFA]</small>
 
:* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/Macht hoch die Tür|Macht hoch die Tür]]
 
:* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/Macht hoch die Tür|Macht hoch die Tür]]
 
<small>Created by [[User:The C of E|The C of E]] ([[User talk:The C of E|talk]]). Self-nominated at 13:20, 28 November 2017 (UTC).</small>
 
<small>Created by [[User:The C of E|The C of E]] ([[User talk:The C of E|talk]]). Self-nominated at 13:20, 28 November 2017 (UTC).</small>
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: [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Decent bio (without saying much about her as a person, though), on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Hook: please avoid the repetition of the club's name, rather tell us what she played which could be cards or golf ;) I think there's no relation between the two things, so suggest to say "Akers who had told her". I am open to a completely different hook because it says more about him than her. - Article: please go over it, looking for repetition (joined , following, retirement). I guess there more elegant ways than "which meant that" and "able to take over his role". The quote from the hook needs something, can't follow the name, I'd think. These are only suggestions, not relevant for approval, but once I look ... - Thank you for review of the hymn! --[[User:Gerda Arendt|Gerda Arendt]] ([[User talk:Gerda Arendt|talk]]) 11:46, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
 
: [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Decent bio (without saying much about her as a person, though), on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Hook: please avoid the repetition of the club's name, rather tell us what she played which could be cards or golf ;) I think there's no relation between the two things, so suggest to say "Akers who had told her". I am open to a completely different hook because it says more about him than her. - Article: please go over it, looking for repetition (joined , following, retirement). I guess there more elegant ways than "which meant that" and "able to take over his role". The quote from the hook needs something, can't follow the name, I'd think. These are only suggestions, not relevant for approval, but once I look ... - Thank you for review of the hymn! --[[User:Gerda Arendt|Gerda Arendt]] ([[User talk:Gerda Arendt|talk]]) 11:46, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
 
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::I have altered the hook. You have to say the club name twice as it is the quote that is forcing the repeat, not the full hook. Personally I am fine with leaving the hook as it is. <span style="text-shadow:grey 0.5em 0.5em 0.6em;"> '''[[User:The C of E|<font color="red">The C of E  </font><font color="blue"> God Save the Queen!</font>]]''' ([[User talk:The C of E|<font color="darkblue">talk</font>]])</span> 18:33, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
 
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Clare Wheatley

  • ... that football player Clare Wheatley took over as Arsenal Ladies' development officer and general manager roles from Vic Akers who had told her "Arsenal Ladies is not a social club"? Source: WFA

Created by The C of E (talk). Self-nominated at 13:20, 28 November 2017 (UTC).

Symbol question.svg Decent bio (without saying much about her as a person, though), on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Hook: please avoid the repetition of the club's name, rather tell us what she played which could be cards or golf ;) I think there's no relation between the two things, so suggest to say "Akers who had told her". I am open to a completely different hook because it says more about him than her. - Article: please go over it, looking for repetition (joined , following, retirement). I guess there more elegant ways than "which meant that" and "able to take over his role". The quote from the hook needs something, can't follow the name, I'd think. These are only suggestions, not relevant for approval, but once I look ... - Thank you for review of the hymn! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:46, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
I have altered the hook. You have to say the club name twice as it is the quote that is forcing the repeat, not the full hook. Personally I am fine with leaving the hook as it is. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 18:33, 1 December 2017 (UTC)