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::*[[File:Symbol possible vote.svg|16px]] Neither the article nor the source make any mention of Djawoto seeking political asylum, simply that he was granted it. Also, I've read the article's final sentence, {{tq|Albeit not a communist cadre, Djawoto has not allowed to return to Indonesia.}}, more than once without understanding what it's getting at: the first clause makes no sense in context, and both clauses have grammatical problems. [[User:BlueMoonset|BlueMoonset]] ([[User talk:BlueMoonset|talk]]) 01:52, 18 May 2014 (UTC) | ::*[[File:Symbol possible vote.svg|16px]] Neither the article nor the source make any mention of Djawoto seeking political asylum, simply that he was granted it. Also, I've read the article's final sentence, {{tq|Albeit not a communist cadre, Djawoto has not allowed to return to Indonesia.}}, more than once without understanding what it's getting at: the first clause makes no sense in context, and both clauses have grammatical problems. [[User:BlueMoonset|BlueMoonset]] ([[User talk:BlueMoonset|talk]]) 01:52, 18 May 2014 (UTC) | ||
:::*For me it's ok to switch 'sought' for 'was granted' in the hook. As per the last sentence, it was a typo, now corrected. --[[User:Soman|Soman]] ([[User talk:Soman|talk]]) 07:26, 20 May 2014 (UTC) | :::*For me it's ok to switch 'sought' for 'was granted' in the hook. As per the last sentence, it was a typo, now corrected. --[[User:Soman|Soman]] ([[User talk:Soman|talk]]) 07:26, 20 May 2014 (UTC) | ||
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| + | ::::*As an individual cannot be a cadre, the last sentence still makes no sense. I've removed the first clause. However, what remains needs context: did he ask to return? When was he refused permission and by whom (or was it the government as a whole)? [[User:BlueMoonset|BlueMoonset]] ([[User talk:BlueMoonset|talk]]) 14:34, 22 May 2014 (UTC) | ||
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Djawoto
- ... that in 1966 the Indonesian ambassador Djawoto (pictured) sought political asylum in China?
- ALT1 suggestion: ... that in 1966 Indonesian ambassador Djawoto (pictured) sought political asylum in China, following the mass killings of 1965-66?
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Mourneview Park
Created by Soman (talk). Self nominated at 19:23, 13 May 2014 (UTC).
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Sufficient prose length; hook under 200 characters; appears neutral; reliable seeming sources and hook cited (and specifically checked for verifiability); spot check found no infringement; created within the past five days. In short, ready to go!--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 04:46, 16 May 2014 (UTC)
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Neither the article nor the source make any mention of Djawoto seeking political asylum, simply that he was granted it. Also, I've read the article's final sentence, Template:Tq, more than once without understanding what it's getting at: the first clause makes no sense in context, and both clauses have grammatical problems. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:52, 18 May 2014 (UTC)
- As an individual cannot be a cadre, the last sentence still makes no sense. I've removed the first clause. However, what remains needs context: did he ask to return? When was he refused permission and by whom (or was it the government as a whole)? BlueMoonset (talk) 14:34, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
