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:*[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] Article is in reasonably good shape now. I removed the content about the ambassador from the article. AGF due to foreign-language sourcing. Here is an idea for hook wording:
 
:*[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] Article is in reasonably good shape now. I removed the content about the ambassador from the article. AGF due to foreign-language sourcing. Here is an idea for hook wording:
 
::*'''ALT2:''' ... that, as a publisher and literary critic, '''[[Drago Siliqi]]''' increased translation of foreign literature into [[Albanian language|Albanian]] and encouraged [[Ismail Kadare]] to write his first novel, ''[[The General of the Dead Army]]''? --[[User:Orlady|Orlady]] ([[User talk:Orlady|talk]]) 17:56, 5 February 2012 (UTC)
 
::*'''ALT2:''' ... that, as a publisher and literary critic, '''[[Drago Siliqi]]''' increased translation of foreign literature into [[Albanian language|Albanian]] and encouraged [[Ismail Kadare]] to write his first novel, ''[[The General of the Dead Army]]''? --[[User:Orlady|Orlady]] ([[User talk:Orlady|talk]]) 17:56, 5 February 2012 (UTC)
 
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:::*I'm not the nominator here, but I think ALT2 is a little better. [[User:Crisco 1492|Crisco 1492]] ([[User talk:Crisco 1492|talk]]) 23:09, 5 February 2012 (UTC)
 
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Drago Siliqi

  • Comment: This is my first DYK nomination so please advice if anything is wrong. Also, I will not accept any suggestions that the hook should concern his death. The hook should be positive. Thank you!

Created/expanded by MalsorShqipniet (talk). Self nom at 07:31, 13 January 2012 (UTC)

Symbol question.svg The problem with the current hook is that it is wordy--in fact, it is too long (it's 224). Start by cutting "ist" from criticist. Moreover, more than half of it is really about someone else. You can remove "inaugural winner...Prize", which I don't think you need anyway.
ALT: "... that Albanian poet and literary critic Drago Siliqi encouraged Ismail Kadare to write his first novel, The General of the Dead Army?"
But that's still mostly about someone else. I have no suggestions to offer--that he died tragically, you don't want that--though I don't understand your objection. Finally, the article needs a copyedit, for punctuation, word choice, grammar. Drmies (talk) 05:17, 14 January 2012 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg I've given it a copyedit, and I think the ALT hook is fine. Any other issues? Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:06, 5 February 2012 (UTC)
  • Come to think of it, I don't think the bits about the ambassador are pertinent to the article. Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:13, 5 February 2012 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Article is in reasonably good shape now. I removed the content about the ambassador from the article. AGF due to foreign-language sourcing. Here is an idea for hook wording:
  • I'm not the nominator here, but I think ALT2 is a little better. Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:09, 5 February 2012 (UTC)