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:*I've struck the first hook because it focuses more on Toscanini than Kurtz. I find the ALT1 hook rather wordy. Is there any way you could focus on one fact in a hooky way? Thanks, [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 00:06, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
 
:*I've struck the first hook because it focuses more on Toscanini than Kurtz. I find the ALT1 hook rather wordy. Is there any way you could focus on one fact in a hooky way? Thanks, [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 00:06, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
 
::*Thank you {{u|Yoninah}}. Hmm.. ALT2 focuses on the fact that the edition was based exclusively on facsimile manuscripts by Anna Magdalena Bach, but that probably is not interesting to people who know nothing about editions of classical masterworks. ALT3 maybe is more interesting to a broad audience. Your thoughts? [[User:Zingarese|Zingarese]] [[User talk:Zingarese#top|<small>talk</small>]] · [[Special:Contributions/Zingarese|<small>contribs</small>]] 19:08, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
 
::*Thank you {{u|Yoninah}}. Hmm.. ALT2 focuses on the fact that the edition was based exclusively on facsimile manuscripts by Anna Magdalena Bach, but that probably is not interesting to people who know nothing about editions of classical masterworks. ALT3 maybe is more interesting to a broad audience. Your thoughts? [[User:Zingarese|Zingarese]] [[User talk:Zingarese#top|<small>talk</small>]] · [[Special:Contributions/Zingarese|<small>contribs</small>]] 19:08, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
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:::*Thank you for the alts. I personally don't like long quotes in an article or hook, especially when such simple words could easily be paraphrased. Here's another idea:
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:::*'''ALT4''': ... that '''[[Edmund Kurtz]]''' left a 20-year career as a principal cellist in European and American orchestras to launch a solo career, performing for another 40 years? (This hook would need something added to the article about when his solo career ended.)
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:::*If you still want to focus on the facsimile edition, you could avoid the quoted text this way:
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:::*'''ALT5''': ... that '''[[Edmund Kurtz]]'''{{`s}} edition of [[Cello Suites (Bach)|Bach cello suites]], published in 1983, is recognized as one of his greatest achievements? (But you see how this really isn't so hooky.)
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:::*BTW Kurtz isn't even mentioned on the [[Cello Suites (Bach)]] page. [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 19:28, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
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Edmund Kurtz

ALT2:... that the cellist Edmund KurtzTemplate:`s edition of Bach's cello suites were exclusively based on the manuscripts of Anna Magdalena Bach? Source: https://books.google.com/books?id=2lHPUtMFkPoC, p. 73
ALT3:... that the cellist Edmund KurtzTemplate:`s edition of the Bach cello suites has been considered to be his "most important contribution to the development of the art of the cello"? Source: https://books.google.com/books?id=2lHPUtMFkPoC, p. 73

Created by Zingarese (talk). Self-nominated at 18:31, 29 May 2020 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. QPQ done.
  • I've struck the first hook because it focuses more on Toscanini than Kurtz. I find the ALT1 hook rather wordy. Is there any way you could focus on one fact in a hooky way? Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 00:06, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
  • Thank you Template:U. Hmm.. ALT2 focuses on the fact that the edition was based exclusively on facsimile manuscripts by Anna Magdalena Bach, but that probably is not interesting to people who know nothing about editions of classical masterworks. ALT3 maybe is more interesting to a broad audience. Your thoughts? Zingarese talk · contribs 19:08, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
  • Thank you for the alts. I personally don't like long quotes in an article or hook, especially when such simple words could easily be paraphrased. Here's another idea:
  • ALT4: ... that Edmund Kurtz left a 20-year career as a principal cellist in European and American orchestras to launch a solo career, performing for another 40 years? (This hook would need something added to the article about when his solo career ended.)
  • If you still want to focus on the facsimile edition, you could avoid the quoted text this way:
  • ALT5: ... that Edmund KurtzTemplate:`s edition of Bach cello suites, published in 1983, is recognized as one of his greatest achievements? (But you see how this really isn't so hooky.)
  • BTW Kurtz isn't even mentioned on the Cello Suites (Bach) page. Yoninah (talk) 19:28, 1 July 2020 (UTC)