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:::As one who took a part in expanding the article, I am going to refrain from reviewing the hook (it wouldn't be fair play), but I will make some suggestions regarding the hooks:
 
:::As one who took a part in expanding the article, I am going to refrain from reviewing the hook (it wouldn't be fair play), but I will make some suggestions regarding the hooks:
 
:::1. The original hook strikes me as a bit bland in comparison with any of the alts. These things tend to happen to people when they first witness dissections and such, and it doesn't tell readers how interesting the article is (which it is!).
 
:::1. The original hook strikes me as a bit bland in comparison with any of the alts. These things tend to happen to people when they first witness dissections and such, and it doesn't tell readers how interesting the article is (which it is!).
:::2. Perhaps ALT 1 could be improved. The really interesting tidbit is not that Popa spoke out at the Academy against the local dictator Antonescu, and then against the country's Communist Party. It is that he spoke out against fascism (including Nazism), then against communism. Could it also be emphasized somehow that his antifascist lectures began when fascism was still in power? It is not immediately apparent from the hook, but it is a most astounding fact.
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:::2. <s>Perhaps ALT 1 could be improved. The really interesting tidbit is not that Popa spoke out at the Academy against the local dictator Antonescu, and then against the country's Communist Party. It is that he spoke out against fascism (including Nazism), then against communism. Could it also be emphasized somehow that his antifascist lectures began when fascism was still in power? It is not immediately apparent from the hook, but it is a most astounding fact.</s> Excellent.
 
:::I want to congratulate Biruitorul for writing this article on someone who surely was one of the most lucid voices in modern Romanian history. [[User:Dahn|Dahn]] ([[User talk:Dahn|talk]]) 09:45, 13 June 2014 (UTC)
 
:::I want to congratulate Biruitorul for writing this article on someone who surely was one of the most lucid voices in modern Romanian history. [[User:Dahn|Dahn]] ([[User talk:Dahn|talk]]) 09:45, 13 June 2014 (UTC)
  
 
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Grigore T. Popa

  • ... that future Romanian anatomist Grigore T. Popa fainted when he first entered a dissecting room?

Created by Biruitorul (talk). Self nominated at 05:00, 5 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Comment Unlinking Romania - common word. Few tweaks to hooks. Edwardx (talk) 13:57, 5 June 2014 (UTC)
As one who took a part in expanding the article, I am going to refrain from reviewing the hook (it wouldn't be fair play), but I will make some suggestions regarding the hooks:
1. The original hook strikes me as a bit bland in comparison with any of the alts. These things tend to happen to people when they first witness dissections and such, and it doesn't tell readers how interesting the article is (which it is!).
2. Perhaps ALT 1 could be improved. The really interesting tidbit is not that Popa spoke out at the Academy against the local dictator Antonescu, and then against the country's Communist Party. It is that he spoke out against fascism (including Nazism), then against communism. Could it also be emphasized somehow that his antifascist lectures began when fascism was still in power? It is not immediately apparent from the hook, but it is a most astounding fact. Excellent.
I want to congratulate Biruitorul for writing this article on someone who surely was one of the most lucid voices in modern Romanian history. Dahn (talk) 09:45, 13 June 2014 (UTC)