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:*Thanks. The '''AlT1''' Hook needs a little more expansion with words "but also from India and many other Commonwealth countries". It could read as '''ALT2''' hook: ... that not only casualties from the [[United Kingdom]] but also from [[India]] and many other Commonwealth countries are buried in the '''[[Imphal War Cemetery]]'''? You are welcome to copy edit.--'''[[User talk:Nvvchar|<span style="font-variant:small-caps;color:#003366">Nvvchar</span>]]'''. 07:49, 16 March 2015 (UTC) | :*Thanks. The '''AlT1''' Hook needs a little more expansion with words "but also from India and many other Commonwealth countries". It could read as '''ALT2''' hook: ... that not only casualties from the [[United Kingdom]] but also from [[India]] and many other Commonwealth countries are buried in the '''[[Imphal War Cemetery]]'''? You are welcome to copy edit.--'''[[User talk:Nvvchar|<span style="font-variant:small-caps;color:#003366">Nvvchar</span>]]'''. 07:49, 16 March 2015 (UTC) | ||
+ | ::* Okay, I gave the article a light copy edit. While I designed ALT1 to provoke curiosity, your suggested ALT2 tells all. Let the viewer read the article to find out who else is buried there. It has been my experience that viewers will click a DYK to satisfy their curiosity. | ||
+ | ::* Final reviewer needed, to approve ALT1.[[User:Georgejdorner|Georgejdorner]] ([[User talk:Georgejdorner|talk]]) 15:12, 16 March 2015 (UTC) | ||
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Imphal War Cemetery
- ... that the Imphal War Cemetery (pictured) has 1,600 Commonwealth burials of the Second World War and is maintained by the Commonwealth War Graves Commission?
ALT1: ... that not only casualties from the United Kingdom are buried in the Imphal War Cemetery?
Created by Nvvchar (talk). Self nominated at 12:16, 12 March 2015 (UTC).
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- Thanks. The AlT1 Hook needs a little more expansion with words "but also from India and many other Commonwealth countries". It could read as ALT2 hook: ... that not only casualties from the United Kingdom but also from India and many other Commonwealth countries are buried in the Imphal War Cemetery? You are welcome to copy edit.--Nvvchar. 07:49, 16 March 2015 (UTC)
- Okay, I gave the article a light copy edit. While I designed ALT1 to provoke curiosity, your suggested ALT2 tells all. Let the viewer read the article to find out who else is buried there. It has been my experience that viewers will click a DYK to satisfy their curiosity.
- Final reviewer needed, to approve ALT1.Georgejdorner (talk) 15:12, 16 March 2015 (UTC)