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{{*mp}}... that [[Australia at the 2012 Summer Paralympics|2012 Australian Paralympic athletics competitor]] '''[[Jack Swift (athlete)|Jack Swift]]''' was a finalist for the 2011 Victorian Cleo Bachelor of the Year?
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{{*mp}}... that [[Australia at the 2012 Summer Paralympics|2012 Australian Paralympic athletics competitor]] '''[[Jack Swift (athlete)|Jack Swift]]''' was a finalist for the 2011 Victorian [[Cleo (magazine)|Cleo]] Bachelor of the Year?
 
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:*Hook and content check out.  Should Cleo in the article link to [[Cleo (magazine)]]?  It currently links to a DAB page.  I only ask this because I think it might be necessary to link it in the hook.  I had no idea what the Victorian Cleo Bachelor of the Year was.  After finding the magazine, I take that it is similar to GQ.  In addition, he was only a finalist, so it might be better to discuss that prior to his disablement he worked as a plumber.  The plumber story is interesting, but I can't think of an incredibly hooky way to say it.  In any case, everything [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] checks out.  I'd just like to see a thought on the lead.  (You may want to create a DAB at [[Jack Swift]] while you are at it.&nbsp;[[User:Ryan Vesey|'''''Ryan''''']]&nbsp;[[User talk:Ryan Vesey|'''''Vesey''''']]&nbsp;[[Special:Contributions/Ryan Vesey|<small>Review me!</small>]] 05:04, 24 July 2012 (UTC)
 
:*Hook and content check out.  Should Cleo in the article link to [[Cleo (magazine)]]?  It currently links to a DAB page.  I only ask this because I think it might be necessary to link it in the hook.  I had no idea what the Victorian Cleo Bachelor of the Year was.  After finding the magazine, I take that it is similar to GQ.  In addition, he was only a finalist, so it might be better to discuss that prior to his disablement he worked as a plumber.  The plumber story is interesting, but I can't think of an incredibly hooky way to say it.  In any case, everything [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] checks out.  I'd just like to see a thought on the lead.  (You may want to create a DAB at [[Jack Swift]] while you are at it.&nbsp;[[User:Ryan Vesey|'''''Ryan''''']]&nbsp;[[User talk:Ryan Vesey|'''''Vesey''''']]&nbsp;[[Special:Contributions/Ryan Vesey|<small>Review me!</small>]] 05:04, 24 July 2012 (UTC)
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:Oops.  yeah.  I fixed that Cleo problem.  Disambigs are not my strong point. :(  Hard to find interesting things in some articles. : / Lead does need to be improved a bit but hard to do when article so short. ;) --[[User:LauraHale|LauraHale]] ([[User talk:LauraHale|talk]]) 05:10, 24 July 2012 (UTC)
  
  
 
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Revision as of 05:10, 24 July 2012

Jack Swift (athlete)

  • Reviewed: Dock Ellis
  • Comment: Save for the Paralympics? Moved from user space.

Created/expanded by LauraHale (talk). Self nom at 09:24, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

  • Hook and content check out. Should Cleo in the article link to Cleo (magazine)? It currently links to a DAB page. I only ask this because I think it might be necessary to link it in the hook. I had no idea what the Victorian Cleo Bachelor of the Year was. After finding the magazine, I take that it is similar to GQ. In addition, he was only a finalist, so it might be better to discuss that prior to his disablement he worked as a plumber. The plumber story is interesting, but I can't think of an incredibly hooky way to say it. In any case, everything Symbol confirmed.svg checks out. I'd just like to see a thought on the lead. (You may want to create a DAB at Jack Swift while you are at it. Ryan Vesey Review me! 05:04, 24 July 2012 (UTC)
Oops. yeah. I fixed that Cleo problem. Disambigs are not my strong point. :( Hard to find interesting things in some articles. : / Lead does need to be improved a bit but hard to do when article so short. ;) --LauraHale (talk) 05:10, 24 July 2012 (UTC)