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:*[[File:Symbol possible vote.svg|16px]] Hi [[User:Hawkeye7|Hawkeye7]], review follows: 7.3x expansion confirmed from 12 September; article is well written and cited inline throughout to reliable sources; hooks are both interesting, mentioned in the article and backed up by the sources; image is PD and good at small scale; a QPQ has been carried out
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there's a few similarities in wording to the ''Navy Times'' article, are there any ways of rewording the following:
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::*"liaison between his headquarters and the nine Pacific training commands"
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::*"serve as special assistant to the Chief of Naval Operations for women's policy"
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::*"the first female executive officer of the Navy's New York Recruiting District"
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::*" Orlando Naval Training Center in Orlando, Florida, which processed 30,000 enlistees a year. It had been severely criticized the year before for the manner in which it handled allegations of rape and sexual harassment"
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::Though I appreciate with many technical terms and proper names it is sometimes difficult to find alternative ways or wording sentences.  Otherwise, no issues here- [[User:Dumelow|Dumelow]] ([[User talk:Dumelow|talk]]) 07:09, 15 September 2020 (UTC)
  
 
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Revision as of 07:09, 15 September 2020

Kathleen Byerly

Byerly as a commander
Byerly as a commander
  • ... that Kathleen Byerly (pictured) was one of the twelve women featured on the cover of Time magazine as Time Person of the Year for 1975? Source: "one of 12 women featured on the cover of Time magazine for a "Women of the Year" (1975) issue" [1][2])
    • ALT1:... that Kathleen Byerly (pictured) was one of six sailors who sued the U.S. Navy for the right to serve on ships? Source: "A year later, she and five other female sailors helped clear the path for women to serve on ships and aircraft engaged in combat — assignments previously barred to them under the Women’s Armed Services Integration Act of 1948. The sailors, who claimed their careers and potential promotions were negatively impacted by the policy, filed a class-action lawsuit against the secretary of defense and secretary of the Navy in 1977, and U.S. District Judge John Sirica, of Watergate fame, determined the law was unconstitutional in 1978." ([3])

5x expanded by Hawkeye7 (talk). Self-nominated at 02:01, 15 September 2020 (UTC).

  • Symbol possible vote.svg Hi Hawkeye7, review follows: 7.3x expansion confirmed from 12 September; article is well written and cited inline throughout to reliable sources; hooks are both interesting, mentioned in the article and backed up by the sources; image is PD and good at small scale; a QPQ has been carried out

there's a few similarities in wording to the Navy Times article, are there any ways of rewording the following:

  • "liaison between his headquarters and the nine Pacific training commands"
  • "serve as special assistant to the Chief of Naval Operations for women's policy"
  • "the first female executive officer of the Navy's New York Recruiting District"
  • " Orlando Naval Training Center in Orlando, Florida, which processed 30,000 enlistees a year. It had been severely criticized the year before for the manner in which it handled allegations of rape and sexual harassment"
Though I appreciate with many technical terms and proper names it is sometimes difficult to find alternative ways or wording sentences. Otherwise, no issues here- Dumelow (talk) 07:09, 15 September 2020 (UTC)