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:Also, upon rereading the prose I think it does need some work, so I've requested a check for the [[WP:GOCE]], though we'll have to see if that review is forthcoming. I will check for sourcing shortly before giving you the tick. - [[User:Jarry1250|Jarry1250]] <sup>[''[[User_talk:Jarry1250|Deliberation]] [[Special:Contributions/Jarry1250|needed]]'']</sup> 20:28, 10 February 2013 (UTC) | :Also, upon rereading the prose I think it does need some work, so I've requested a check for the [[WP:GOCE]], though we'll have to see if that review is forthcoming. I will check for sourcing shortly before giving you the tick. - [[User:Jarry1250|Jarry1250]] <sup>[''[[User_talk:Jarry1250|Deliberation]] [[Special:Contributions/Jarry1250|needed]]'']</sup> 20:28, 10 February 2013 (UTC) | ||
::All sourced added as i did the additions and took from the source. | ::All sourced added as i did the additions and took from the source. | ||
| − | ::Not sure what copy edit is needed. Can yuo pt out instances so i can do it?[[User:Lihaas|Lihaas]] ([[User talk:Lihaas|talk]]) 07:31, 11 February 2013 (UTC) | + | ::Not sure what copy edit is needed. Can yuo pt out instances so i can do it?[[User:Lihaas|Lihaas]] ([[User talk:Lihaas|talk]]) 07:31, 11 February 2013 (UTC) |
| + | :::Well, not to put too fine a point on it, the whole thing really needs a copyedit; it's nothing personal, it's just that it comes across as awkward to me (as a native English speaker). | ||
| + | :::Having looked at the sourcing, though, I have some concerns there. For example, paragraph 2 of Reactions (beginning with " | ||
| + | Government of Punjab Minister for Law Rana Sanaullah said that people..."), including a direct quotation, is cited to reference 4, but that source does not mention Rana Sanaullah, nor does it post-date the march. Is this an isolated case, or will I find that ll the way through? - [[User:Jarry1250|Jarry1250]] <sup>[''[[User_talk:Jarry1250|Deliberation]] [[Special:Contributions/Jarry1250|needed]]'']</sup> 22:58, 11 February 2013 (UTC) | ||
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Long March (Pakistan)
- ... that the government of Pakistan signed the Islamabad Long March Declaration on 17 January, 2013?
- Reviewed: The Girl (2012 HBO film)
Created by Lihaas (talk). Self nom at 06:58, 19 January 2013 (UTC)
- Note- its on ITNC, but im pretty suer it wont get on since it hasnt had a comment yet. If it does ill withdraw this.Lihaas (talk) 06:59, 19 January 2013 (UTC)
QPQ fine, article eligible (created Jan 15, nom Jan 19). The prose is of acceptable quality but would benefit from a specialist copyedit. However, I do have some concerns. Firstly, the spelling of M(u/o)hammed is inconsistent between the hook and the article. Secondly, the article does not actually say that Tahir-ul-Qadri signed the declaration, only that the government did. Thirdly, the hook is rather boring and could more usefully pick up on some other fact relevant to the declaration. I look forward to rereviewing the article shortly (do feel free to talkback me). Thanks, - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 13:22, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
- ALT1:
- ... that the government of Pakistan signed the Long March Declaration on 17 January 2013, allowing Muhammad Tahir-ul-Qadri to help decide upon a caretaker Prime Minister?
- Also, upon rereading the prose I think it does need some work, so I've requested a check for the WP:GOCE, though we'll have to see if that review is forthcoming. I will check for sourcing shortly before giving you the tick. - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 20:28, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
- All sourced added as i did the additions and took from the source.
- Not sure what copy edit is needed. Can yuo pt out instances so i can do it?Lihaas (talk) 07:31, 11 February 2013 (UTC)
- Well, not to put too fine a point on it, the whole thing really needs a copyedit; it's nothing personal, it's just that it comes across as awkward to me (as a native English speaker).
- Having looked at the sourcing, though, I have some concerns there. For example, paragraph 2 of Reactions (beginning with "
Government of Punjab Minister for Law Rana Sanaullah said that people..."), including a direct quotation, is cited to reference 4, but that source does not mention Rana Sanaullah, nor does it post-date the march. Is this an isolated case, or will I find that ll the way through? - Jarry1250 [Deliberation needed] 22:58, 11 February 2013 (UTC)