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:{{Strikethrough|* '''ALT1''':... that "robber baron" '''[[Louis F. Menage]]''' built the [[Metropolitan Building (Minneapolis)|tallest skyscraper in Minneapolis, Minnesota]] to house the offices of his real estate and mortgage businesses?}} | :{{Strikethrough|* '''ALT1''':... that "robber baron" '''[[Louis F. Menage]]''' built the [[Metropolitan Building (Minneapolis)|tallest skyscraper in Minneapolis, Minnesota]] to house the offices of his real estate and mortgage businesses?}} | ||
:*{{Strikethrough| '''ALT2''':... that '''[[Louis F. Menage]]''' used some the profits from his [[Minneapolis, Minnesota]] real estate business to finance a scientific expedition to the [[Philippines]]?}} | :*{{Strikethrough| '''ALT2''':... that '''[[Louis F. Menage]]''' used some the profits from his [[Minneapolis, Minnesota]] real estate business to finance a scientific expedition to the [[Philippines]]?}} | ||
− | :* '''ALT3''':... that "robber baron" '''[[Louis F. Menage]]''' built what was then the [[Metropolitan Building (Minneapolis)|tallest skyscraper in Minneapolis, Minnesota]] to house his offices? | + | :* '''ALT3''':... that in 1890, "robber baron" '''[[Louis F. Menage]]''' built what was then the [[Metropolitan Building (Minneapolis)|tallest skyscraper in Minneapolis, Minnesota]] to house his offices? |
:* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/El Gamma Penumbra|El Gamma Penumbra]] | :* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/El Gamma Penumbra|El Gamma Penumbra]] | ||
<small>Created by [[User:Nsteffel|Nsteffel]] ([[User talk:Nsteffel|talk]]). Self-nominated at 21:37, 31 August 2015 (UTC).</small> | <small>Created by [[User:Nsteffel|Nsteffel]] ([[User talk:Nsteffel|talk]]). Self-nominated at 21:37, 31 August 2015 (UTC).</small> | ||
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::: That might work, so long as you have a source for that. [[User:Gatoclass|Gatoclass]] ([[User talk:Gatoclass|talk]]) 16:55, 20 September 2015 (UTC) | ::: That might work, so long as you have a source for that. [[User:Gatoclass|Gatoclass]] ([[User talk:Gatoclass|talk]]) 16:55, 20 September 2015 (UTC) | ||
:::: [[https://books.google.com/books?id=uTC-uzSxNm4C&lpg=PA167&dq=%22Louis%20F.%20Menage%22&pg=PA167#v=onepage&q=%22Louis%20F.%20Menage%22&f=false|ref]] notes it was the tallest. Let's give it another go — new hook above. If there's a better phrasing you can think of let me know. [[User:Nsteffel|Nsteffel]] ([[User talk:Nsteffel|talk]]) 22:03, 20 September 2015 (UTC) | :::: [[https://books.google.com/books?id=uTC-uzSxNm4C&lpg=PA167&dq=%22Louis%20F.%20Menage%22&pg=PA167#v=onepage&q=%22Louis%20F.%20Menage%22&f=false|ref]] notes it was the tallest. Let's give it another go — new hook above. If there's a better phrasing you can think of let me know. [[User:Nsteffel|Nsteffel]] ([[User talk:Nsteffel|talk]]) 22:03, 20 September 2015 (UTC) | ||
+ | ::::: That looks fine now. I added a year to the hook to clarify the "then". I might just give this article the once-over for WP:PARAPHRASE before re-promoting it. [[User:Gatoclass|Gatoclass]] ([[User talk:Gatoclass|talk]]) 07:23, 21 September 2015 (UTC) | ||
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- ALT3:... that in 1890, "robber baron" Louis F. Menage built what was then the tallest skyscraper in Minneapolis, Minnesota to house his offices?
- Reviewed: El Gamma Penumbra
Created by Nsteffel (talk). Self-nominated at 21:37, 31 August 2015 (UTC).
Article is new enough, long enough, no major problems spotted. ALT1 hook is short enough and corroborated by the cited source. To make it even better, I would suggest adding the phrase "robber baron" (in quotes) before the man's name in the hook, and also put it in the article; it's in Korom's book. File:Metropolitan_Building_Minneapolis.jpg could be used as an image. QPQ done. QVVERTYVS (hm?) 11:26, 8 September 2015 (UTC)
- As long as you don't have any concerns about the quality of the Metropolitan Building (Minneapolis) article I'm fine with those suggestions. I've tweaked the hook and added two quotations to the lede of Menage's article supporting that characterization. Nsteffel (talk) 17:41, 8 September 2015 (UTC)
QVVERTYVS (hm?) 22:43, 8 September 2015 (UTC)
Some doubts have been raised about the veracity of the hook, here, so I have returned it from prep until the issue can be resolved. Gatoclass (talk) 11:37, 20 September 2015 (UTC)
- I would be fine with editing the hook to refer to it as the city's then-tallest skyscraper in lieu of first if that would satisfy the concerns raised. Nsteffel (talk) 14:12, 20 September 2015 (UTC)