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[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] I got one other reviewer to look at this, who liked the Alt 1 better, so with that I believe that this article and Alt1 hook are good to go.[[User:Sarnold17|Sarnold17]] ([[User talk:Sarnold17|talk]]) 15:52, 16 June 2012 (UTC)
 
[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] I got one other reviewer to look at this, who liked the Alt 1 better, so with that I believe that this article and Alt1 hook are good to go.[[User:Sarnold17|Sarnold17]] ([[User talk:Sarnold17|talk]]) 15:52, 16 June 2012 (UTC)
  
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:*[[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] The assertion that he was a "noted curator" is not supported by inline sourcing, nor is the Distinguished Flying Cross. (The citation must be nearby.) Using "noted" is questionable due to [[WP:PEACOCK]]. Here's a suggested revision without "noted" that also gets Purnell's name closer to the beginning:
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::*'''ALT2''': ... that '''[[Louis Purnell]]''', a curator at the [[National Air and Space Museum]], flew 88 bomber escort missions during [[World War II]] as a [[Tuskegee Airman]] and earned the [[Distinguished Flying Cross (United States)|Distinguished Flying Cross]]? —[[User:BlueMoonset|BlueMoonset]] ([[User talk:BlueMoonset|talk]]) 18:54, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
  
  
 
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Louis Purnell

Created/expanded by Alanscottwalker (talk). Self nom at 20:11, 15 June 2012 (UTC)

* Article is new enough, long enough, and meets policy guidelines.
* Hook is short enough but needs a little more pizazz. I don't think that overcoming racial discrimination is worth mentioning; I doubt there is a successful African-American who hasn't dealt with that. Personally, what caught my eye, and why I'm reviewing this, is that Purnell was a Tuskegee Airman, so I would lean more towards that being the hook. Could I propose the following?:
Of course, the article will have to be expanded a bit to include the piece about the escort missions and DFC. This is my very first DYK review, and I will be delighted to get some additional insights on this.Sarnold17 (talk) 00:43, 16 June 2012 (UTC)


Overcoming racism is interesting to me but I just think he's an interesting guy, so please feel free to add to the article more about his missions. Alanscottwalker (talk) 02:58, 16 June 2012 (UTC)
I meant to thank you for your review. I have added a clause on the 88 missions to the article, so the alternative may be used; I have no objection, if that is what others really want. Alanscottwalker (talk) 14:29, 16 June 2012 (UTC)

Symbol confirmed.svg I got one other reviewer to look at this, who liked the Alt 1 better, so with that I believe that this article and Alt1 hook are good to go.Sarnold17 (talk) 15:52, 16 June 2012 (UTC)

  • Symbol question.svg The assertion that he was a "noted curator" is not supported by inline sourcing, nor is the Distinguished Flying Cross. (The citation must be nearby.) Using "noted" is questionable due to WP:PEACOCK. Here's a suggested revision without "noted" that also gets Purnell's name closer to the beginning: