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::[[User:Onceinawhile|Onceinawhile]] ([[User talk:Onceinawhile|talk]]) 15:49, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
 
::[[User:Onceinawhile|Onceinawhile]] ([[User talk:Onceinawhile|talk]]) 15:49, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
 
:::How about a hook relating to Mrinalini’s views on [[Kadambari Devi]]. That is sure to get some clicks! [[User:Onceinawhile|Onceinawhile]] ([[User talk:Onceinawhile|talk]]) 15:54, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
 
:::How about a hook relating to Mrinalini’s views on [[Kadambari Devi]]. That is sure to get some clicks! [[User:Onceinawhile|Onceinawhile]] ([[User talk:Onceinawhile|talk]]) 15:54, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
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*[[File:Symbol possible vote.svg|16px]] The article is need of a copyedit before this can be promoted. There are many awkward grammatical constructions throughout the article. In addition, the hook, while it has potential, lacks context for non-Indian readers. For example, it states "unlike traditional marriages". How are readers supposed to know what a traditional Indian marriage is like? The hook does not make sense without context. Failing that, we can go with Onceinawhile's suggestion:
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::'''ALT1''' ... that [[Rabindranath Tagore]] married his wife '''[[Mrinalini Devi]]''' when she was nine years old and he was twenty-two?
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::'''ALT1a''' ... that the Indian writer and Nobel laureate [[Rabindranath Tagore]] married his wife '''[[Mrinalini Devi]]''' when she was nine years old and he was twenty-two?
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Mrinalini Devi

Mrinalini Devi with Rabindranath Tagore, 1883
Mrinalini Devi with Rabindranath Tagore, 1883

Created by Royroydeb (talk). Self-nominated at 05:22, 1 June 2019 (UTC).

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Template:Ping Frankly, Tagore is not hardly celebrated outside the Bengal region, so hardly is there any other language source with much information. I could only find these (1 2 3). Also during those days, marrying at 9 was not uncommon. RRD (talk) 15:35, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
How about: Sahu, Monideepa (15 May 2013). "Chapter 7: Marriage". Rabindranath Tagore: Puffin Lives. Penguin Books Limited. ISBN 978-81-8475-991-4.
Onceinawhile (talk) 15:49, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
How about a hook relating to Mrinalini’s views on Kadambari Devi. That is sure to get some clicks! Onceinawhile (talk) 15:54, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
  • Symbol possible vote.svg The article is need of a copyedit before this can be promoted. There are many awkward grammatical constructions throughout the article. In addition, the hook, while it has potential, lacks context for non-Indian readers. For example, it states "unlike traditional marriages". How are readers supposed to know what a traditional Indian marriage is like? The hook does not make sense without context. Failing that, we can go with Onceinawhile's suggestion:
ALT1 ... that Rabindranath Tagore married his wife Mrinalini Devi when she was nine years old and he was twenty-two?
ALT1a ... that the Indian writer and Nobel laureate Rabindranath Tagore married his wife Mrinalini Devi when she was nine years old and he was twenty-two?
Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 15:34, 12 June 2019 (UTC)