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:Just some citations to sort out... --[[User:Gibmetal77|<span style="margin:0;text-align:left;color:#FF7F00;font-size:80%;font-family:Tahoma;font-weight:bold;padding:0.2em 0.4em">Gibmetal 77</span>]]<sup>[[User Talk:Gibmetal77|<font color="#99 32 CC">talk 2 me</font>]]</sup> 00:02, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
 
:Just some citations to sort out... --[[User:Gibmetal77|<span style="margin:0;text-align:left;color:#FF7F00;font-size:80%;font-family:Tahoma;font-weight:bold;padding:0.2em 0.4em">Gibmetal 77</span>]]<sup>[[User Talk:Gibmetal77|<font color="#99 32 CC">talk 2 me</font>]]</sup> 00:02, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
 
::Ah yes. I asked the article creator if the book reference references all the text above it. [[User_talk:MChew#DYK_3|I am still waiting for a reply]]. Thanks, [[User:Matty.007|<span style="color: #F00;">Mat</span>]][[User talk:Matty.007|<span style="color: #010132;">ty</span>]]<span style="color: #800080">.</span>[[Special:Contributions/Matty.007|<span style="color: #039685">007</span>]] 17:07, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
 
::Ah yes. I asked the article creator if the book reference references all the text above it. [[User_talk:MChew#DYK_3|I am still waiting for a reply]]. Thanks, [[User:Matty.007|<span style="color: #F00;">Mat</span>]][[User talk:Matty.007|<span style="color: #010132;">ty</span>]]<span style="color: #800080">.</span>[[Special:Contributions/Matty.007|<span style="color: #039685">007</span>]] 17:07, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
::*Perhaps I'm missing something obvious, but I do not find this hook interesting. It is not at all surprising to me that a Japanese man in an old-looking military uniform might have been the son of a samurai -- and without the image there would nothing here of interest at all. The hook gives me no reason to want to read about this man. Is there something interesting about the son of a samurai becoming an officer in the early Imperial Japanese Army? Perhaps a different hook could be written about his military experience, for example:
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:::Perhaps I'm missing something obvious, but I do not find this hook interesting. It is not at all surprising to me that a Japanese man in an old-looking military uniform might have been the son of a samurai -- and without the image there would nothing here of interest at all. The hook gives me no reason to want to read about this man. Is there something interesting about the son of a samurai becoming an officer in the early Imperial Japanese Army? Perhaps a different hook could be written about his military experience, for example:
::*'''ALT1''': that '''[[Nakamura Satoru]]''' ''(pictured)'' was wounded and lost most of his men in [[forlorn hope]] assaults on Russian fortifications during the [[Siege of Port Arthur]]? --[[User:Orlady|Orlady]] ([[User talk:Orlady|talk]]) 20:34, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
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:::*'''ALT1''': that '''[[Nakamura Satoru]]''' ''(pictured)'' was wounded and lost most of his men in [[forlorn hope]] assaults on Russian fortifications during the [[Siege of Port Arthur]]? --[[User:Orlady|Orlady]] ([[User talk:Orlady|talk]]) 20:34, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
 
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Nakamura Satoru

A man in military uniform with medals

Created by MChew (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 12:37, 23 February 2014 (UTC).

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Just some citations to sort out... --Gibmetal 77talk 2 me 00:02, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
Ah yes. I asked the article creator if the book reference references all the text above it. I am still waiting for a reply. Thanks, Matty.007 17:07, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
Perhaps I'm missing something obvious, but I do not find this hook interesting. It is not at all surprising to me that a Japanese man in an old-looking military uniform might have been the son of a samurai -- and without the image there would nothing here of interest at all. The hook gives me no reason to want to read about this man. Is there something interesting about the son of a samurai becoming an officer in the early Imperial Japanese Army? Perhaps a different hook could be written about his military experience, for example: