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*" ... the aircraft had suffered a runway propeller as it departed San Francisco ... " Was there something wrong with the propeller?
 
*" ... the aircraft had suffered a runway propeller as it departed San Francisco ... " Was there something wrong with the propeller?
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*:''Runaway propellers had been described in the last paragraph of the Aircraft section before I added the citation about the San Francisco incident, overlooking the fact that I hadn't yet defined what a runaway propeller was.  I moved the section describing the overall history of the Stratocruisers, which includes defining what a runaway propeller is, to the second paragraph of that section.''
  
 
*" ... and centrifugal force forces ... " Awkward wording.
 
*" ... and centrifugal force forces ... " Awkward wording.
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*:''Agreed.  I changed that.''
  
 
*" ... had been flying with the company since 1942 since his graduation ... " Perhaps, " ... since his 1942 graduation ..."
 
*" ... had been flying with the company since 1942 since his graduation ... " Perhaps, " ... since his 1942 graduation ..."
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*:''Agreed.  Another instance of writing and rewriting to add and move information around.''
  
 
*"As soon as the aircraft was reported missing and all fuel supplies had been exhausted ... " Whose fuel supplies?   
 
*"As soon as the aircraft was reported missing and all fuel supplies had been exhausted ... " Whose fuel supplies?   
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*:''The missing aircraft.  I reworded that sentence to more clearly state that.''
  
 
Please let me know. [[User:Maile66|— Maile ]] ([[User talk:Maile66|talk]]) 16:14, 31 August 2019 (UTC)
 
Please let me know. [[User:Maile66|— Maile ]] ([[User talk:Maile66|talk]]) 16:14, 31 August 2019 (UTC)

Revision as of 16:01, 3 September 2019

Pan Am Flight 7

A Pan Am Stratocruiser similar to the accident aircraft.
A Pan Am Stratocruiser similar to the accident aircraft.
  • ... that the cause of the crash of Pan Am Flight 7 was never able to be determined? Source: CAB report
    • ALT1:... that the week-long search for Pan Am Flight 7 was the largest search and rescue operation in the Pacific Ocean at the time? Source: San Francisco Examiner 16 Jan 1958

5x expanded by RecycledPixels (talk). Self-nominated at 19:12, 21 August 2019 (UTC).

  • Review by Maile
QPQ
  • No QPQ needed, not enough previous nominations
Eligibility
  • DYK Check tool verifies 321102 characters (3621 words) "readable prose size". 2049 characters prior to 5X expansion that began on August 17
Sourcing
  • All verifiable sourcing used.
Hook
  • Hooks sourcing verified
  • Original hook is 78 characters
  • ALT1 is 122 characters
Images
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Copyvio check
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  • Earwig's tool shows no issues of concern

Symbol question.svg This is a really fascinating and detailed article. I found some grammar awkwardness that should be clarified:

  • " ... the aircraft had suffered a runway propeller as it departed San Francisco ... " Was there something wrong with the propeller?
    Runaway propellers had been described in the last paragraph of the Aircraft section before I added the citation about the San Francisco incident, overlooking the fact that I hadn't yet defined what a runaway propeller was. I moved the section describing the overall history of the Stratocruisers, which includes defining what a runaway propeller is, to the second paragraph of that section.
  • " ... and centrifugal force forces ... " Awkward wording.
    Agreed. I changed that.
  • " ... had been flying with the company since 1942 since his graduation ... " Perhaps, " ... since his 1942 graduation ..."
    Agreed. Another instance of writing and rewriting to add and move information around.
  • "As soon as the aircraft was reported missing and all fuel supplies had been exhausted ... " Whose fuel supplies?
    The missing aircraft. I reworded that sentence to more clearly state that.

Please let me know. — Maile (talk) 16:14, 31 August 2019 (UTC)