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|comments    = The original hook is my preferred option but at least needs rewording ("that is controlled to his nerve impulses"). Both ALT hooks are fine but less interesting  
 
|comments    = The original hook is my preferred option but at least needs rewording ("that is controlled to his nerve impulses"). Both ALT hooks are fine but less interesting  
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:::::*BBC: "Patrick was the first patient in the world to choose to have his hand amputated"
 
:::::*BBC: "Patrick was the first patient in the world to choose to have his hand amputated"
 
:::::I therefore suggest the following ALT hooks:
 
:::::I therefore suggest the following ALT hooks:
:::::*'''ALT0a''': ... that [[2018 Winter Paralympics|Paralympic]] [[snowboarding at the 2018 Winter Paralympics – Men's banked slalom|silver-medal winning]] [[snowboard racing|snowboarder]] '''[[Patrick Mayrhofer]]''' was the first person in the world to get a [[bionics|bionic]] hand [[prosthesis]] that is controlled by his neural signals?  
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:::::*'''ALT0a''': ... that [[2018 Winter Paralympics|Paralympic]] [[snowboarding at the 2018 Winter Paralympics – Men's banked slalom|silver-medal winning]] [[snowboard racing|snowboarder]] '''[[Patrick Mayrhofer]]''' was the first person in the world to get a [[bionics|bionic]] hand [[prosthesis]] that is controlled by his [[neural engineering|neural signals]]?  
:::::*'''ALT0b''': ... that [[2018 Winter Paralympics|Paralympic]] [[snowboarding at the 2018 Winter Paralympics – Men's banked slalom|silver-medal winning]] [[snowboard racing|snowboarder]] '''[[Patrick Mayrhofer]]''' was the first person in the world to get a [[bionics|bionic]] hand [[prosthesis]] after an elective amputation?  
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:::::*'''ALT0b''': ... that [[2018 Winter Paralympics|Paralympic]] [[snowboarding at the 2018 Winter Paralympics – Men's banked slalom|silver-medal winning]] [[snowboard racing|snowboarder]] '''[[Patrick Mayrhofer]]''' was the first person in the world to get a [[bionics|bionic]] hand [[prosthesis]] after an [[elective surgery|elective]] [[amputation]]?  
:::::*'''ALT0c''': ... that [[2018 Winter Paralympics|Paralympic]] [[snowboarding at the 2018 Winter Paralympics – Men's banked slalom|silver-medal winning]] [[snowboard racing|snowboarder]] '''[[Patrick Mayrhofer]]''' was the first person in the world to undergo elective amputation and get a [[bionics|bionic]] [[prosthesis]]?  
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:::::*'''ALT0c''': ... that [[2018 Winter Paralympics|Paralympic]] [[snowboarding at the 2018 Winter Paralympics – Men's banked slalom|silver-medal winning]] [[snowboard racing|snowboarder]] '''[[Patrick Mayrhofer]]''' was the first person in the world to undergo [[elective surgery|elective]] [[amputation]] and get a [[bionics|bionic]] [[prosthesis]]?  
 
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--> We're going to need a third party to look over these now - may as well get that started while you work on the QPQ. [[user:violetriga|violet/riga]]&nbsp;<sub><sup>[[user talk:violetriga|[talk]]]</sup></sub> 21:35, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
 
--> We're going to need a third party to look over these now - may as well get that started while you work on the QPQ. [[user:violetriga|violet/riga]]&nbsp;<sub><sup>[[user talk:violetriga|[talk]]]</sup></sub> 21:35, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
 
:::::: {{Reply|violetriga|label1=violet/riga}} Oh, good spot; thank you. I definitely prefer ALT0a of those 3, as the neural signals part is just freaking cool. It could be worth adding a link to [[Neural engineering]] to ALT0a; ALT0b and ALT0c could link to [[Elective surgery]] and [[Amputation]]. I've completed the QPQ now, [[Template:Did you know nominations/Alleged Libyan influence in the 2007 French elections|here]]. Thanks again! — <span class="vcard"><span class="fn">[[User:OwenBlacker|OwenBlacker]]</span> <small>([[User talk:OwenBlacker|talk]]; please &#123;&#123;[[Template:ping|ping]]&#125;&#125; me in replies)</small></span> 22:08, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
 
:::::: {{Reply|violetriga|label1=violet/riga}} Oh, good spot; thank you. I definitely prefer ALT0a of those 3, as the neural signals part is just freaking cool. It could be worth adding a link to [[Neural engineering]] to ALT0a; ALT0b and ALT0c could link to [[Elective surgery]] and [[Amputation]]. I've completed the QPQ now, [[Template:Did you know nominations/Alleged Libyan influence in the 2007 French elections|here]]. Thanks again! — <span class="vcard"><span class="fn">[[User:OwenBlacker|OwenBlacker]]</span> <small>([[User talk:OwenBlacker|talk]]; please &#123;&#123;[[Template:ping|ping]]&#125;&#125; me in replies)</small></span> 22:08, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
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:::::::Updates made to review and ALT0s. [[user:violetriga|violet/riga]]&nbsp;<sub><sup>[[user talk:violetriga|[talk]]]</sup></sub> 07:20, 24 April 2018 (UTC)
 
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Patrick Mayrhofer

Created by OwenBlacker (talk). Self-nominated at 22:37, 20 March 2018 (UTC).

  • Review:

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Template:Ping - are you planning to complete this nomination? violet/riga [talk] 07:40, 20 April 2018 (UTC)
Template:Reply Sorry about that; I'd completely forgotten that I still had the QPQ outstanding and hadn't spotted that you had replied. Thanks for having {{ping}}ed me to bring it to my attention — I'll take a look over the weekend and {{ping}} you back. Thanks again! — OwenBlacker (talk; please {{ping}} me in replies) 09:23, 20 April 2018 (UTC)
PS: I've never seen that use of <sub><sup> to make smaller middle-aligned text before. Nice effect! 😊
Template:Reply I've tweaked the wording there — the change of "neural signals" to "nerve impulses" was me trying to simplify the wording of the hook. Is that better? (I'll go find one to QPQ now.) — OwenBlacker (talk; please {{ping}} me in replies) 20:34, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
Template:Reply Okay that works better. Delving into this a little further I'm not fully sure of the hook's claim. Examining the sources does not backup the claim "...first person in the world to get a bionic prosthesis that is controlled by his neural signals":
  • Article: "first patient in the world to undergo elective amputation and receive a bionic prosthesis"
  • MB: "first person worldwide to receive a bionic hand prosthesis"
  • DW: "Europe's first bionic hand" & "...a bionic hand powered by neural signals. The first man to get one..."
  • BBC: "Patrick was the first patient in the world to choose to have his hand amputated"
I therefore suggest the following ALT hooks:
Symbol redirect vote 4.svg We're going to need a third party to look over these now - may as well get that started while you work on the QPQ. violet/riga [talk] 21:35, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
Template:Reply Oh, good spot; thank you. I definitely prefer ALT0a of those 3, as the neural signals part is just freaking cool. It could be worth adding a link to Neural engineering to ALT0a; ALT0b and ALT0c could link to Elective surgery and Amputation. I've completed the QPQ now, here. Thanks again! — OwenBlacker (talk; please {{ping}} me in replies) 22:08, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
Updates made to review and ALT0s. violet/riga [talk] 07:20, 24 April 2018 (UTC)