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* ... that producer '''[[Paul F. Heard]]''' believed that techniques used in government [[propaganda film]]s could be used in [[List of religious films|religious films]] to bring about "spiritual realizations"? <small>Source: "He believed 'similar techniques' could be used to address contemporary problems requiring 'spiritual realizations'". ([https://books.google.co.il/books?id=YZ9QI-t7TwUC&pg=PA114&redir_esc=y#v=onepage&q&f=false ''Reforming Hollywood''])</small>
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* <s>... that producer '''[[Paul F. Heard]]''' believed that techniques used in government [[propaganda film]]s could be used in [[List of religious films|religious films]] to bring about "spiritual realizations"? </s> <small>Source: "He believed 'similar techniques' could be used to address contemporary problems requiring 'spiritual realizations'". ([https://books.google.co.il/books?id=YZ9QI-t7TwUC&pg=PA114&redir_esc=y#v=onepage&q&f=false ''Reforming Hollywood''])</small>
 
:* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/Tubby Schmalz]]
 
:* ''Reviewed'': [[Template:Did you know nominations/Tubby Schmalz]]
 
<small>Created by [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]). Self-nominated at 20:28, 5 May 2020 (UTC).</small>
 
<small>Created by [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]). Self-nominated at 20:28, 5 May 2020 (UTC).</small>
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::Hook is under the length limit and interesting to a general public. It's reasonably neutral, although it comes off as a little conspiratorial out of context. I hate to be perfectionist, but is there a chance you'd like to change the second "used in" to "applied to", the way it is in the article? [[User:FourViolas|FourViolas]] ([[User talk:FourViolas|talk]]) 01:33, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
 
::Hook is under the length limit and interesting to a general public. It's reasonably neutral, although it comes off as a little conspiratorial out of context. I hate to be perfectionist, but is there a chance you'd like to change the second "used in" to "applied to", the way it is in the article? [[User:FourViolas|FourViolas]] ([[User talk:FourViolas|talk]]) 01:33, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
 
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:::*Thanks for the review. Sure, your suggestion is fine, but "applying a technique" sounds a little strange. How about "employing a technique"?
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:::*'''ALT1''': ... that producer '''[[Paul F. Heard]]''' believed that techniques used in government [[propaganda film]]s could be employed in [[List of religious films|religious films]] to bring about "spiritual realizations"? [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 14:21, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
 
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Paul F. Heard

Created by Yoninah (talk). Self-nominated at 20:28, 5 May 2020 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg New enough, long enough. Paraphrasing is fine. Exceptionally well-researched and fully-cited; I was going to make the minor comment I had to take this page on AGF as a RS for the PFC-to-BFC merger under WP:PUBLISHED, but then the clipping at the end of the sentence confirmed it. Neutral and clear throughout.
Hook is under the length limit and interesting to a general public. It's reasonably neutral, although it comes off as a little conspiratorial out of context. I hate to be perfectionist, but is there a chance you'd like to change the second "used in" to "applied to", the way it is in the article? FourViolas (talk) 01:33, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. Sure, your suggestion is fine, but "applying a technique" sounds a little strange. How about "employing a technique"?
  • ALT1: ... that producer Paul F. Heard believed that techniques used in government propaganda films could be employed in religious films to bring about "spiritual realizations"? Yoninah (talk) 14:21, 22 May 2020 (UTC)