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| − | : | + | : [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Interesting life, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. The image is licensed and the perfect match. - Minor questions: I would word the hook differently, how is this? |
| + | : '''ALT1''': ... that '''[[Persis Foster Eames Albee|PFE Albee]]''' ''(pictured)'' is considered the first "Avon Lady", followed by about a half million others? | ||
| + | : Her parents: when I read about a father and a mother, I assume they were not married, otherwise I'd expect "and his wife". I may be wrong ;) | ||
| + | : I can't tell if she's known as PFE, because the lead says only "also". | ||
| + | : I guess she was born Eames, not Albee. | ||
| + | : I find it funny to read about her husband's profession a while after they got married. | ||
| + | : "There has been about 450,000 Avon Ladies", I'd expect "There have been about 450,000 Avon Ladies", or better no "there" at the beginning anyway ;) | ||
| + | : Please check if every new section has her name (and not just "she") when referring to her. | ||
| + | : Someone will tag the article for "lead too short", better avoid that. --[[User:Gerda Arendt|Gerda Arendt]] ([[User talk:Gerda Arendt|talk]]) 10:10, 19 April 2017 (UTC) | ||
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Persis Foster Eames Albee
- ... that PFE Albee (pictured) is considered the very first "Avon Lady" and was followed by 500,000 more?
Source is James: "With over 500,000 Avon ladies in the United States, Avon has been careful to partner with them" and Olsen: c. 1886, U.S. saleswoman PFE ALbee becomes the first of about of about a half million "Avon Ladies." as refs #28 & #29.
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/D. J. Wilson - using second of two.
Created by Doug Coldwell (talk) and 7&6=thirteen (talk). Nominated by Doug Coldwell (talk) at 11:46, 14 April 2017 (UTC).
Interesting life, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. The image is licensed and the perfect match. - Minor questions: I would word the hook differently, how is this?- ALT1: ... that PFE Albee (pictured) is considered the first "Avon Lady", followed by about a half million others?
- Her parents: when I read about a father and a mother, I assume they were not married, otherwise I'd expect "and his wife". I may be wrong ;)
- I can't tell if she's known as PFE, because the lead says only "also".
- I guess she was born Eames, not Albee.
- I find it funny to read about her husband's profession a while after they got married.
- "There has been about 450,000 Avon Ladies", I'd expect "There have been about 450,000 Avon Ladies", or better no "there" at the beginning anyway ;)
- Please check if every new section has her name (and not just "she") when referring to her.
- Someone will tag the article for "lead too short", better avoid that. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:10, 19 April 2017 (UTC)
