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::*{{ping|Raymie}} Please type down parts with bad English grammar, so I can fix it.--[[User:Jeromi Mikhael|Jeromi Mikhael]] ([[User talk:Jeromi Mikhael|talk]]) 01:24, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
 
::*{{ping|Raymie}} Please type down parts with bad English grammar, so I can fix it.--[[User:Jeromi Mikhael|Jeromi Mikhael]] ([[User talk:Jeromi Mikhael|talk]]) 01:24, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
 
:::*[[File:Symbol voting keep.svg|16px]] I've gone ahead and done it for you. There are several extraneous uses of "the", incorrect tenses, etc. [https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Sadjarwo_Djarwonagoro&type=revision&diff=959882162&oldid=959855426 Check this diff] to see what I changed; hopefully that aids your writing of additional articles. [[User:Raymie|Raymie]] ([[User talk:Raymie|t]] • [[Special:Contributions/Raymie|c]]) 01:46, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
 
:::*[[File:Symbol voting keep.svg|16px]] I've gone ahead and done it for you. There are several extraneous uses of "the", incorrect tenses, etc. [https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Sadjarwo_Djarwonagoro&type=revision&diff=959882162&oldid=959855426 Check this diff] to see what I changed; hopefully that aids your writing of additional articles. [[User:Raymie|Raymie]] ([[User talk:Raymie|t]] • [[Special:Contributions/Raymie|c]]) 01:46, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
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::::*[[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] Hi, I came by to promote this, and first edited the article for English grammar. I added "clarification needed" tags in a few places where words or unfamiliar acronyms were inserted. I find the hook confusing. You take great pains to explain he was not a leftist, so why are you calling him a leftist in the hook? I would prefer to see a normal hook with his name in bold and some interesting fact about him as a hook angle. [[User:Yoninah|Yoninah]] ([[User talk:Yoninah|talk]]) 22:20, 16 June 2020 (UTC)
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Revision as of 22:20, 16 June 2020

Sadjarwo Djarwonagoro

Created/expanded by Jeromi Mikhael (talk). Self-nominated at 14:04, 27 May 2020 (UTC).

  • New enough and long enough. No QPQ necessary (zero credits). I can't check the foreign-language sources, so I'm going to have to assume good faith. One thing I notice is the article needs copy editing for English. Have you considered taking this to WP:GOCE, Template:U? The issues I found are enough to probably merit a copy edit before approval. Raymie (tc) 23:17, 30 May 2020 (UTC)
  • Symbol voting keep.svg I've gone ahead and done it for you. There are several extraneous uses of "the", incorrect tenses, etc. Check this diff to see what I changed; hopefully that aids your writing of additional articles. Raymie (tc) 01:46, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Hi, I came by to promote this, and first edited the article for English grammar. I added "clarification needed" tags in a few places where words or unfamiliar acronyms were inserted. I find the hook confusing. You take great pains to explain he was not a leftist, so why are you calling him a leftist in the hook? I would prefer to see a normal hook with his name in bold and some interesting fact about him as a hook angle. Yoninah (talk) 22:20, 16 June 2020 (UTC)