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:*[[File:Symbol possible vote.svg|16px]] Hi [[User:HickoryOughtShirt?4|HickoryOughtShirt?4]], review follows: article created 25 October; article exceeds minimum length; article is adequately well written; article is cited inline throughout to reliable sources; hook fact is interesting, though is worded a little unusually - the "initally" part sounds a little strange to me as there is no connection between that and her coming to the US (I would have said "politician '''[[Safiya Wazir]]''' fled [[Afghanistan]] to [[Uzbekistan]] as a refugee before emigrating to the United States?"), though perhaps it is an American English thing? hook is backed up by the cited source (Business Insider); There's one similar phrasing from a source that you may want to look at: "She sat on the board of directors for the Community Action Program and became vice-chairwoman of the Head Start Policy Council" versus "serving as the board of directors for the Community Action Program and vice-chairwoman of the Head Start Policy Council" from the Concord Monitor, though perhaps there's limited ways this can be reworded; nomination needs a QPQ review; if you could let me know your comments, I'll come back to finish the review, thanks - [[User:Dumelow|Dumelow]] ([[User talk:Dumelow|talk]]) 10:20, 28 October 2019 (UTC) | :*[[File:Symbol possible vote.svg|16px]] Hi [[User:HickoryOughtShirt?4|HickoryOughtShirt?4]], review follows: article created 25 October; article exceeds minimum length; article is adequately well written; article is cited inline throughout to reliable sources; hook fact is interesting, though is worded a little unusually - the "initally" part sounds a little strange to me as there is no connection between that and her coming to the US (I would have said "politician '''[[Safiya Wazir]]''' fled [[Afghanistan]] to [[Uzbekistan]] as a refugee before emigrating to the United States?"), though perhaps it is an American English thing? hook is backed up by the cited source (Business Insider); There's one similar phrasing from a source that you may want to look at: "She sat on the board of directors for the Community Action Program and became vice-chairwoman of the Head Start Policy Council" versus "serving as the board of directors for the Community Action Program and vice-chairwoman of the Head Start Policy Council" from the Concord Monitor, though perhaps there's limited ways this can be reworded; nomination needs a QPQ review; if you could let me know your comments, I'll come back to finish the review, thanks - [[User:Dumelow|Dumelow]] ([[User talk:Dumelow|talk]]) 10:20, 28 October 2019 (UTC) | ||
::*{{re|Dumelow}} I did a QPQ shortly before I submitted this but forgot to attach it here. And the quoted thing may fit the limited ways bill. [[User:Miraclepine|ミラ]][[User talk:Miraclepine|P]] 15:18, 28 October 2019 (UTC) | ::*{{re|Dumelow}} I did a QPQ shortly before I submitted this but forgot to attach it here. And the quoted thing may fit the limited ways bill. [[User:Miraclepine|ミラ]][[User talk:Miraclepine|P]] 15:18, 28 October 2019 (UTC) | ||
− | :::[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] Hi [[User:Miraclepine|Miraclepine]] (sorry I pinged the wrong person first time), thanks for providing the QPQ. I've reworded the sentence I found slightly to be a little further from the source. I'm still not wholly sold on the wording of the hook but am happy it is interesting and factual, so will approve - [[User:Dumelow|Dumelow]] ([[User talk:Dumelow|talk]]) 16:28, 28 October 2019 (UTC) | + | ::::[[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] Hi [[User:Miraclepine|Miraclepine]] (sorry I pinged the wrong person first time), thanks for providing the QPQ. I've reworded the sentence I found slightly to be a little further from the source. I'm still not wholly sold on the wording of the hook but am happy it is interesting and factual, so will approve - [[User:Dumelow|Dumelow]] ([[User talk:Dumelow|talk]]) 16:28, 28 October 2019 (UTC) |
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Safiya Wazir
- ... that American politician Safiya Wazir
initiallycame to Uzbekistan as a refugee from Afghanistan? Source: [1] "[Wazir] escaped Afghanistan as a child and lived in a Uzbekistan refugee camp for ten years"
- Reviewed: South Audley Street
- Comment: Another day, another BBC 100 Women article submitted to DYK.
Created by HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk). Nominated by Miraclepine (talk) at 02:23, 27 October 2019 (UTC).
Hi HickoryOughtShirt?4, review follows: article created 25 October; article exceeds minimum length; article is adequately well written; article is cited inline throughout to reliable sources; hook fact is interesting, though is worded a little unusually - the "initally" part sounds a little strange to me as there is no connection between that and her coming to the US (I would have said "politician Safiya Wazir fled Afghanistan to Uzbekistan as a refugee before emigrating to the United States?"), though perhaps it is an American English thing? hook is backed up by the cited source (Business Insider); There's one similar phrasing from a source that you may want to look at: "She sat on the board of directors for the Community Action Program and became vice-chairwoman of the Head Start Policy Council" versus "serving as the board of directors for the Community Action Program and vice-chairwoman of the Head Start Policy Council" from the Concord Monitor, though perhaps there's limited ways this can be reworded; nomination needs a QPQ review; if you could let me know your comments, I'll come back to finish the review, thanks - Dumelow (talk) 10:20, 28 October 2019 (UTC)
- Template:Re I did a QPQ shortly before I submitted this but forgot to attach it here. And the quoted thing may fit the limited ways bill. ミラP 15:18, 28 October 2019 (UTC)
Hi Miraclepine (sorry I pinged the wrong person first time), thanks for providing the QPQ. I've reworded the sentence I found slightly to be a little further from the source. I'm still not wholly sold on the wording of the hook but am happy it is interesting and factual, so will approve - Dumelow (talk) 16:28, 28 October 2019 (UTC)