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::I have to say that there aren't many vegan footballers. How about we just change the hook to state that he became vegan and not mention the fitness quote?[[User:EchetusXe|Echetus]][[User talk:EchetusXe|'''X'''e]] 13:31, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 
::I have to say that there aren't many vegan footballers. How about we just change the hook to state that he became vegan and not mention the fitness quote?[[User:EchetusXe|Echetus]][[User talk:EchetusXe|'''X'''e]] 13:31, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 
:::There are quite a few famous vegan footballers ([https://www.bbc.co.uk/food/articles/vegan_footballers], [https://www.goal.com/en/news/vegan-footballers-diets-health-benefits-players-who-have-cut/l2z310of3pl71kjxn3aive0nn], [https://www.sportskeeda.com/football/5-world-class-football-players-who-are-100-vegan]), and I just don't see how someone being vegan is that interesting of a hook. [[User:Joseph2302|<b style="color:#0033ab">Joseph</b>]][[User talk:Joseph2302|<b style="color:#000000">2302</b>]] ([[User talk:Joseph2302|talk)]] 18:07, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
 
:::There are quite a few famous vegan footballers ([https://www.bbc.co.uk/food/articles/vegan_footballers], [https://www.goal.com/en/news/vegan-footballers-diets-health-benefits-players-who-have-cut/l2z310of3pl71kjxn3aive0nn], [https://www.sportskeeda.com/football/5-world-class-football-players-who-are-100-vegan]), and I just don't see how someone being vegan is that interesting of a hook. [[User:Joseph2302|<b style="color:#0033ab">Joseph</b>]][[User talk:Joseph2302|<b style="color:#000000">2302</b>]] ([[User talk:Joseph2302|talk)]] 18:07, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
 
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::::Okay I'll have to reach a bit for something interesting with this otherwise rather ordinary footballer. But reading again through the article this angle stood out for me:
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*... that professional footballer '''[[Shaun Brisley]]''' scored for [[Peterborough United F.C.|Peterborough United]] in the [[2014 Football League Trophy Final]] after having initially turned down a move to the club due to him feeling homesick? [https://peterborough.vitalfootball.co.uk/posh-sign-shaun-brisley-from-macclesfield/ "We had Shaun here three years ago because we were aware of his potential then, but he was homesick and didn`t fancy coming"] [https://www.bbc.co.uk/sport/football/26703740 cup final] [[User:EchetusXe|Echetus]][[User talk:EchetusXe|'''X'''e]] 20:44, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
 
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Shaun Brisley

Improved to Good Article status by EchetusXe (talk). Self-nominated at 15:42, 2 November 2020 (UTC).

  • First, it's not that interesting since many vegan athletes will make similar claims. Second, it's better if the hook doesn't seem to be promoting something (in this case veganism). (t · c) buidhe 10:28, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
  • Seeing a comment was made on 3 November but not a full review, I will conduct a full review (though I agree with Template:U's comments about the hook)
  • checkY Article is long enough (7259 characters), is a GA, nominated in time (became GA on 1 November, nominated on 2 November), and article is within policy
  • ☒N As highlighted above, a hook that a vegan thinks veganism has helped them is uninteresting, as it's very common for vegans to post support for veganism. Please can you provide a more interesting hook?
  • checkY QPQ done
  • Symbol question.svg Template:U Overall, the article is good (no pun intended!), but the hook is not. Joseph2302 (talk) 10:27, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
I have to say that there aren't many vegan footballers. How about we just change the hook to state that he became vegan and not mention the fitness quote?EchetusXe 13:31, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
There are quite a few famous vegan footballers ([1], [2], [3]), and I just don't see how someone being vegan is that interesting of a hook. Joseph2302 (talk) 18:07, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
Okay I'll have to reach a bit for something interesting with this otherwise rather ordinary footballer. But reading again through the article this angle stood out for me: