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:::I've moved the source directly after the hook in the leas, so hopefully that's more clear. I also reworked several of the paragraphs to address paraphrasing concerns. [[User:PaintedCarpet|PaintedCarpet]] ([[User talk:PaintedCarpet|talk]]) 16:23, 28 June 2014 (UTC)     
 
:::I've moved the source directly after the hook in the leas, so hopefully that's more clear. I also reworked several of the paragraphs to address paraphrasing concerns. [[User:PaintedCarpet|PaintedCarpet]] ([[User talk:PaintedCarpet|talk]]) 16:23, 28 June 2014 (UTC)     
 
::::{{DYK?again}} It may be better if another reviewer can check on this article after the revisions done last June 28 for at least a second opinion, as I have reviewed this DYK nomination three times. -[[User:WayKurat|WayKurat]] ([[User talk:WayKurat|talk]]) 13:47, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
 
::::{{DYK?again}} It may be better if another reviewer can check on this article after the revisions done last June 28 for at least a second opinion, as I have reviewed this DYK nomination three times. -[[User:WayKurat|WayKurat]] ([[User talk:WayKurat|talk]]) 13:47, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
: [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] I have reviewed the article, increased the number of citations in the lead section (since that was still, IMO, needed), and checked that the paraphrasing issues seem to have been addressed.[[User:Mary Mark Ockerbloom|Mary Mark Ockerbloom]] ([[User talk:Mary Mark Ockerbloom|talk]]) 05:43, 25 July 2014 (UTC)
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: [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] I have reviewed the article, increased the number of citations in the lead section (since that was still, IMO, needed), and checked that the paraphrasing issues seem to have been addressed.  Either hook seems acceptable based on sources given.[[User:Mary Mark Ockerbloom|Mary Mark Ockerbloom]] ([[User talk:Mary Mark Ockerbloom|talk]]) 05:43, 25 July 2014 (UTC)
 
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Revision as of 05:52, 25 July 2014

Teresa Magbanua

5x expanded by PaintedCarpet (talk). Self nominated at 00:00, 21 June 2014 (UTC).

  • Symbol confirmed.svg No problems with the length and sources. Article has been expanded 5x since creation. Both hooks are also sourced and in the maximum character length. It's GTG for me. -WayKurat (talk) 18:05, 22 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Did you check for close paraphrasing? Yoninah (talk) 22:57, 22 June 2014 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Ok, after double checking the sources, some of them does not directly mention the cited sentence. Ex: "She would often ride on horseback from Sara back to her hometown of Pototan, a 30 kilometres (19 mi) distance over rugged terrain.". The attached source does not mention this. Also some of the external links are dead. If the sources are aligned, it's good to go. -WayKurat (talk) 02:37, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
  • I reworked the sentence you mentioned, since I might have inferred too much when writing the face out in my own words. It should better match the source now. I've also updated the links; the ones in there now should all work. PaintedCarpet (talk) 15:56, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
Template:Unindent Symbol confirmed.svg - Rechecked sources. Dead links already removed, it's aligned so far. Both hooks are supported by multiple sources. Good to go for me. -WayKurat (talk) 11:37, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
Symbol possible vote.svg I've returned this from prep. The hook appears to be unsourced and there is a clear WP:PARAPHRASE issue here. For example - Source: When the Revolution against the Spaniards broke out in Iloilo province in October 1898, Nay Isa lost no time, despite the protest of her husband, in presenting herself to Gen. Perfecto Poblador, her uncle, who had been designated as the commander of the Northern Zone. After the initial hesitation, General Poblador relented and Nay Isa was given command of a bolo battalion. Article: Eager to help (and against the wishes of her husband), Magbanua left Sara and presented herself to her uncle, Major General Perfecto Poblador, who was commander of the Northern Zone at the time. While initially hesitant, General Poblador eventually relented and gave Magbanua the command of a bolo battalion. Gatoclass (talk) 11:01, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
I've moved the source directly after the hook in the leas, so hopefully that's more clear. I also reworked several of the paragraphs to address paraphrasing concerns. PaintedCarpet (talk) 16:23, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
Symbol redirect vote 4.svg It may be better if another reviewer can check on this article after the revisions done last June 28 for at least a second opinion, as I have reviewed this DYK nomination three times. -WayKurat (talk) 13:47, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg I have reviewed the article, increased the number of citations in the lead section (since that was still, IMO, needed), and checked that the paraphrasing issues seem to have been addressed. Either hook seems acceptable based on sources given.Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 05:43, 25 July 2014 (UTC)