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:* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] The article has been recently expanded. It is written from a neutral POV. There are appropriate inline citations. While the hook is cited, I don't think that the wording of the article and the hook reflect the intent of the original wording in the source. I think there is something a little ambiguous about the wording of the hook and the article as it stands now. Your article says that the director wanted to "build on a retelling of the Little Mermaid," and that isn't exactly clear. Is it building on a different retelling, or is it retelling the Little Mermaid itself? I like the wording in the original source that the director wanted to make a movie that "reinvented" the tale of the Little Mermaid. Maybe that's just me being a little bit picky, but I think that that section could be more clear, and the hook more "hooky."[[User:Amgisseman(BYU)|Amgisseman(BYU)]] ([[User talk:Amgisseman(BYU)|talk]]) 21:04, 23 June 2016 (UTC) | :* [[File:Symbol question.svg|16px]] The article has been recently expanded. It is written from a neutral POV. There are appropriate inline citations. While the hook is cited, I don't think that the wording of the article and the hook reflect the intent of the original wording in the source. I think there is something a little ambiguous about the wording of the hook and the article as it stands now. Your article says that the director wanted to "build on a retelling of the Little Mermaid," and that isn't exactly clear. Is it building on a different retelling, or is it retelling the Little Mermaid itself? I like the wording in the original source that the director wanted to make a movie that "reinvented" the tale of the Little Mermaid. Maybe that's just me being a little bit picky, but I think that that section could be more clear, and the hook more "hooky."[[User:Amgisseman(BYU)|Amgisseman(BYU)]] ([[User talk:Amgisseman(BYU)|talk]]) 21:04, 23 June 2016 (UTC) | ||
::*Yeah, I'll pay that - did ponder how to write it. Just saw the film a couple of days ago and was enthused...how about '''ALT1'''... that the 2015 Polish horror film '''''[[The Lure (2015 film)|The Lure]]''''' is a reimagining of ''[[The Little Mermaid]]''? 0r '''ALT2''' ... that the 2015 Polish horror film '''''[[The Lure (2015 film)|The Lure]]''''' was intended as a reimagining of ''[[The Little Mermaid]]''? [[User:Casliber|Cas Liber]] ([[User talk:Casliber|talk]] '''·''' [[Special:Contributions/Casliber|contribs]]) 22:54, 23 June 2016 (UTC) | ::*Yeah, I'll pay that - did ponder how to write it. Just saw the film a couple of days ago and was enthused...how about '''ALT1'''... that the 2015 Polish horror film '''''[[The Lure (2015 film)|The Lure]]''''' is a reimagining of ''[[The Little Mermaid]]''? 0r '''ALT2''' ... that the 2015 Polish horror film '''''[[The Lure (2015 film)|The Lure]]''''' was intended as a reimagining of ''[[The Little Mermaid]]''? [[User:Casliber|Cas Liber]] ([[User talk:Casliber|talk]] '''·''' [[Special:Contributions/Casliber|contribs]]) 22:54, 23 June 2016 (UTC) | ||
| + | :::* [[File:Symbol confirmed.svg|16px]] I think the article looks good under ALT1. I slightly changed the wording of the sentence in the article to match the hook. Thanks for getting back so fast! [[User:Amgisseman(BYU)|Amgisseman(BYU)]] ([[User talk:Amgisseman(BYU)|talk]]) 19:00, 24 June 2016 (UTC) | ||
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The Lure (2015 film)
- ... that the 2015 Polish horror film The Lure was partly developed as a retelling of The Little Mermaid?
5x expanded by Casliber (talk) and Lugnuts (talk). Nominated by Casliber (talk) at 14:56, 22 June 2016 (UTC).
The article has been recently expanded. It is written from a neutral POV. There are appropriate inline citations. While the hook is cited, I don't think that the wording of the article and the hook reflect the intent of the original wording in the source. I think there is something a little ambiguous about the wording of the hook and the article as it stands now. Your article says that the director wanted to "build on a retelling of the Little Mermaid," and that isn't exactly clear. Is it building on a different retelling, or is it retelling the Little Mermaid itself? I like the wording in the original source that the director wanted to make a movie that "reinvented" the tale of the Little Mermaid. Maybe that's just me being a little bit picky, but I think that that section could be more clear, and the hook more "hooky."Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 21:04, 23 June 2016 (UTC)
- Yeah, I'll pay that - did ponder how to write it. Just saw the film a couple of days ago and was enthused...how about ALT1... that the 2015 Polish horror film The Lure is a reimagining of The Little Mermaid? 0r ALT2 ... that the 2015 Polish horror film The Lure was intended as a reimagining of The Little Mermaid? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:54, 23 June 2016 (UTC)
I think the article looks good under ALT1. I slightly changed the wording of the sentence in the article to match the hook. Thanks for getting back so fast! Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 19:00, 24 June 2016 (UTC)