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[[File:Symbol possible vote.svg|16px]] I'm concerned that the phrasings used by this article may be too close to those used by sources. Compare for example "He was tried together with María Elena Aparicio, a museum employee said to be MAR's coordinator for Havana" with "He was brought to trial together with María Elena Aparicio, an employee of the Centro Nacional de Conservación y Museología, National Conservation and Museums Centres, said to be the coordinator of MAR for the city of Havana". [[User:Nikkimaria|Nikkimaria]] ([[User talk:Nikkimaria|talk]]) 00:08, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
 
[[File:Symbol possible vote.svg|16px]] I'm concerned that the phrasings used by this article may be too close to those used by sources. Compare for example "He was tried together with María Elena Aparicio, a museum employee said to be MAR's coordinator for Havana" with "He was brought to trial together with María Elena Aparicio, an employee of the Centro Nacional de Conservación y Museología, National Conservation and Museums Centres, said to be the coordinator of MAR for the city of Havana". [[User:Nikkimaria|Nikkimaria]] ([[User talk:Nikkimaria|talk]]) 00:08, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
 
::{{DYK?again}} Do you find this is acceptable: "He was tried together with María Elena Aparicio. She was an employee of the Centro Nacional de Conservación y Museología (National Conservation and Museums Centres) and was regarded as the Havana coordinator of the MAR." ? Actually I would have to find out now if she still "is" (where I assumed "was"), and think it's less elegant. Help! (You are aware that the author, the voice for Human rights I know on WP, left us, and I try to at least finish what he started?) --[[User:Gerda Arendt|Gerda Arendt]] ([[User talk:Gerda Arendt|talk]]) 07:56, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
 
::{{DYK?again}} Do you find this is acceptable: "He was tried together with María Elena Aparicio. She was an employee of the Centro Nacional de Conservación y Museología (National Conservation and Museums Centres) and was regarded as the Havana coordinator of the MAR." ? Actually I would have to find out now if she still "is" (where I assumed "was"), and think it's less elegant. Help! (You are aware that the author, the voice for Human rights I know on WP, left us, and I try to at least finish what he started?) --[[User:Gerda Arendt|Gerda Arendt]] ([[User talk:Gerda Arendt|talk]]) 07:56, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
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:::It is less elegant and does not solve the problem, unfortunately. Perhaps if you split up the facts or otherwise incorporated them with material from other sources? [[User:Nikkimaria|Nikkimaria]] ([[User talk:Nikkimaria|talk]]) 14:52, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
  
 
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Yndamiro Restano Díaz

Created/expanded by Khazar (talk). Self nom at 11:23, 29 January 2012 (UTC)

  • Symbol confirmed.svg substantial, well sourced, we need to know more of those! Tweaked "a" to "the", it's not that long ago, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:53, 7 February 2012 (UTC)

Symbol possible vote.svg I'm concerned that the phrasings used by this article may be too close to those used by sources. Compare for example "He was tried together with María Elena Aparicio, a museum employee said to be MAR's coordinator for Havana" with "He was brought to trial together with María Elena Aparicio, an employee of the Centro Nacional de Conservación y Museología, National Conservation and Museums Centres, said to be the coordinator of MAR for the city of Havana". Nikkimaria (talk) 00:08, 8 February 2012 (UTC)

Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Do you find this is acceptable: "He was tried together with María Elena Aparicio. She was an employee of the Centro Nacional de Conservación y Museología (National Conservation and Museums Centres) and was regarded as the Havana coordinator of the MAR." ? Actually I would have to find out now if she still "is" (where I assumed "was"), and think it's less elegant. Help! (You are aware that the author, the voice for Human rights I know on WP, left us, and I try to at least finish what he started?) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:56, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
It is less elegant and does not solve the problem, unfortunately. Perhaps if you split up the facts or otherwise incorporated them with material from other sources? Nikkimaria (talk) 14:52, 8 February 2012 (UTC)