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{{U|EEng}}, What do you think about ALT1?--[[User:Antidiskriminator|Antidiskriminator]] ([[User talk:Antidiskriminator|talk]]) 07:15, 27 May 2015 (UTC)
 
{{U|EEng}}, What do you think about ALT1?--[[User:Antidiskriminator|Antidiskriminator]] ([[User talk:Antidiskriminator|talk]]) 07:15, 27 May 2015 (UTC)
 
:Well, "penetrate as much South Slavs as possible" makes no sense, and the article says the same thing so I just don't know what to tell you to do. I think you need to find a native English speaker to copyedit the article for you, and then reconsider the hook. The nomination can go on hold while you get this done. [[User:EEng|EEng]] ([[User talk:EEng|talk]]) 22:32, 27 May 2015 (UTC)
 
:Well, "penetrate as much South Slavs as possible" makes no sense, and the article says the same thing so I just don't know what to tell you to do. I think you need to find a native English speaker to copyedit the article for you, and then reconsider the hook. The nomination can go on hold while you get this done. [[User:EEng|EEng]] ([[User talk:EEng|talk]]) 22:32, 27 May 2015 (UTC)
:*'''ALT2''':... that '''[[Šime Budinić]]''' created complex literary language based on [[Cyrillic]] and [[Glagolitic]] by addition of the [[Czech orthography|Czech]] [[diacritics]] to [[Latin script]] in order to be used by as much [[South Slavs]] as possible?
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:{{U|EEng}}, thanks for advice which I followed ([https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia%3AWikiProject_Guild_of_Copy_Editors%2FRequests&type=revision&diff=664381470&oldid=664362207 diff]) and requested copy editing at GOCE. What do you think about ALT2?--[[User:Antidiskriminator|Antidiskriminator]] ([[User talk:Antidiskriminator|talk]]) 06:18, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
 
:{{U|EEng}}, thanks for advice which I followed ([https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia%3AWikiProject_Guild_of_Copy_Editors%2FRequests&type=revision&diff=664381470&oldid=664362207 diff]) and requested copy editing at GOCE. What do you think about ALT2?--[[User:Antidiskriminator|Antidiskriminator]] ([[User talk:Antidiskriminator|talk]]) 06:18, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
  
 
Why don't you ping me when the copyedit is done and we'll think about hooks then. [[User:EEng|EEng]] ([[User talk:EEng|talk]]) 12:08, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
 
Why don't you ping me when the copyedit is done and we'll think about hooks then. [[User:EEng|EEng]] ([[User talk:EEng|talk]]) 12:08, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
 
:Ok. --[[User:Antidiskriminator|Antidiskriminator]] ([[User talk:Antidiskriminator|talk]]) 12:36, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
 
:Ok. --[[User:Antidiskriminator|Antidiskriminator]] ([[User talk:Antidiskriminator|talk]]) 12:36, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
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I came over at the request of {{U|Antidiskriminator}}. How about this:
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*'''ALT3''': ... that '''[[Šime Budinić]]''' created [[writing system|scripts]] based on [[Cyrillic]] and [[Glagolitic]] derived from [[Czech orthography|Czech]] [[diacritics]] and [[Latin script]] to make [[Catholic Church|Church]] writings accessible to as many 16th century Southern Slavs as possible?
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Still a bit clunky, but I think it is definitely an improvement over the original. If you think it still needs further tweaking, let me know. -'''[[User:Pax85|<font color="darkgreen">Pax</font>]] [[User talk:Pax85|<font color="darkblue">Verbum</font>]]''' 21:23, 16 June 2015 (UTC)
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Revision as of 21:23, 16 June 2015

Šime Budinić

Created by Antidiskriminator (talk). Self-nominated at 23:57, 24 May 2015 (UTC).

  • Struck ALT0 as somewhat unintelligible. I can kind of understand what it's trying to say but not really, so I can't fix it. EEng (talk) 05:23, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

Template:U, What do you think about ALT1?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 07:15, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

Well, "penetrate as much South Slavs as possible" makes no sense, and the article says the same thing so I just don't know what to tell you to do. I think you need to find a native English speaker to copyedit the article for you, and then reconsider the hook. The nomination can go on hold while you get this done. EEng (talk) 22:32, 27 May 2015 (UTC)
  • ALT2:
Template:U, thanks for advice which I followed (diff) and requested copy editing at GOCE. What do you think about ALT2?--Antidiskriminator (talk) 06:18, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

Why don't you ping me when the copyedit is done and we'll think about hooks then. EEng (talk) 12:08, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

Ok. --Antidiskriminator (talk) 12:36, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

I came over at the request of Template:U. How about this:

Still a bit clunky, but I think it is definitely an improvement over the original. If you think it still needs further tweaking, let me know. -Pax Verbum 21:23, 16 June 2015 (UTC)