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Revision as of 06:30, 25 May 2016 by imported>Cwmhiraeth (DYK hook query)
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Philip Egner
... that the first time in history that a woman directed the West Point Band was during a 1932 performance of a Franz von Blon composition?
Created by LavaBaron (talk). Self-nominated at 19:24, 14 May 2016 (UTC).
- ALT1:... that Mabel Bauer became the first woman to conduct the West Point Band during a 1932 performance of a Franz von Blon composition? Moriori (talk) 23:44, 14 May 2016 (UTC)
This article is new enough and long enough. The article is neutral and my spot checks did not bring up any copyright issues. However, I do not like either of the hooks, because they give no indication that the article is the biography of someone. Why not use the On, Brave Old Army Team connection, or if you prefer the woman conductor angle, at least mention Egner's name in the hook. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:30, 25 May 2016 (UTC)