Template:Did you know nominations/Andrés Muschietti

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Andrés Muschietti

Created by Captain Assassin! (talk). Self-nominated at 12:09, 17 July 2015 (UTC).

  • Will start the review within 48 hours. GregorB (talk) 17:24, 6 August 2015 (UTC)
  • The article is new enough (created on July 17), and large enough (2800+ chars of prose).
  • Symbol question.svg The ALT1 hook is fairly uninteresting. The original hook is fine but may appear a bit confusing: the context of the "scariest" quote is unclear (the article makes it clear that these are del Toro's words). The del Toro's quote is genuinely interesting, so I'd suggest a minor rewrite of that part of the article (see article talk) and possibly a new hook, such as:
  • ...or even:
  • ...or something along these lines. I'll continue the review later today. GregorB (talk) 10:05, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
  • Okay, so: nothing wrong with the article's content and structure, no cleanup tags or outstanding issues. No BLP problems. Inline referencing throughout, valid sources.
  • QPQ not done.
  • Symbol question.svg So taking care of hooks and QPQ still needed for promotion, fine in all other departments. GregorB (talk) 18:57, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
  • Template:U, QPQ is fine, but now we have the issue of hooks - ALT0 is a bit awkward, ALT1 is uninteresting, while ALT2 and 3 are not supported by the text (naturally, being just my suggestions). Would you agree with the suggestion in the article's talk? GregorB (talk) 18:25, 11 August 2015 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg I'm afraid that the current wording of the rewritten part is rather awkward, and so is ALT4. Also, ALT4 says "inspired", while the source says "attracted" and "convinced" - not quite the same. Please give me 48 hours to (hopefully) think of something. (Of course, you're welcome to make changes as you see fit.) GregorB (talk) 19:35, 12 August 2015 (UTC)