Template:Did you know nominations/Clare Wheatley

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Clare Wheatley

  • ... that football player Clare Wheatley took over as Arsenal Ladies' development officer and general manager roles from Vic Akers who had told her "Arsenal Ladies is not a social club"? Source: WFA

Created by The C of E (talk). Self-nominated at 13:20, 28 November 2017 (UTC).

Symbol question.svg Decent bio (without saying much about her as a person, though), on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Hook: please avoid the repetition of the club's name, rather tell us what she played which could be cards or golf ;) I think there's no relation between the two things, so suggest to say "Akers who had told her". I am open to a completely different hook because it says more about him than her. - Article: please go over it, looking for repetition (joined , following, retirement). I guess there more elegant ways than "which meant that" and "able to take over his role". The quote from the hook needs something, can't follow the name, I'd think. These are only suggestions, not relevant for approval, but once I look ... - Thank you for review of the hymn! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:46, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
I have altered the hook. You have to say the club name twice as it is the quote that is forcing the repeat, not the full hook. Personally I am fine with leaving the hook as it is. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 18:33, 1 December 2017 (UTC)