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Dennis L. Riley
- ... that after proposing a bill requiring Atlantic City casinos to have table games with a $2 minimum bet, Dennis L. Riley was kicked out of two, which claimed he was card counting in blackjack?
- ALT1 ... that after sponsoring a bill requiring Atlantic City casinos to have table games with a $2 minimum bet, Dennis L. Riley was kicked out of two, which claimed he was card counting in blackjack?
- Reviewed: The Life and Death of John Gotti
Created by Alansohn (talk). Self-nominated at 21:21, 14 September 2016 (UTC).
Template:Ping Date and length fine. However I do have a quibble with the hook. The hook claims he proposed the bill but the article says he sponsored it which I am not too sure are synonymous in political terms. I'd feel much more comfortable if the hook was more consistent with the article before I pass this. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 19:00, 16 September 2016 (UTC)
- Template:Ping, fair enough. I've added ALT1, above using "sponsoring" (rather than "proposing"), and still stayed under the hook limit. Alansohn (talk) 19:18, 16 September 2016 (UTC)
Much better. Hook 199 characters, QPQ done, no close paraphrasing. Good to go. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 19:22, 16 September 2016 (UTC)