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Revision as of 01:06, 5 February 2012 by imported>Crisco 1492 (re)
Drago Siliqi
- ... that Albanian poet and literary criticist Drago Siliqi encouraged and helped inaugural winner of the Man Booker International Prize, Ismail Kadare, to write his first novel, The General of the Dead Army?
- Comment: This is my first DYK nomination so please advice if anything is wrong. Also, I will not accept any suggestions that the hook should concern his death. The hook should be positive. Thank you!
Created/expanded by MalsorShqipniet (talk). Self nom at 07:31, 13 January 2012 (UTC)
The problem with the current hook is that it is wordy--in fact, it is too long (it's 224). Start by cutting "ist" from criticist. Moreover, more than half of it is really about someone else. You can remove "inaugural winner...Prize", which I don't think you need anyway.
- ALT: "... that Albanian poet and literary critic Drago Siliqi encouraged Ismail Kadare to write his first novel, The General of the Dead Army?"
- But that's still mostly about someone else. I have no suggestions to offer--that he died tragically, you don't want that--though I don't understand your objection. Finally, the article needs a copyedit, for punctuation, word choice, grammar. Drmies (talk) 05:17, 14 January 2012 (UTC)
I've given it a copyedit, and I think the ALT hook is fine. Any other issues? Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:06, 5 February 2012 (UTC)